My first attempt

[JustRite]

Please don't hesitate to tell it as it is.

The Rebel

You've got so much anger in you
You've got an attitude
You've got a rebel streak
You're upto no good

You want to break free
You want to do your thing
You want to let the world know
You'll stop at nothing

But you've got to learn to take
the rough with the smooth
You've got to take it slow
On the bumpy roads of youth

You deny you'll mellow with time
It's an eternal lie youth believes
Never pausing to think things through
Before you roll up your sleeves

Chorus:
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But you want to break free
You want to do your thing
You want to let the world know
You'll stop at nothing

But you've got to learn to take
the rough with the smooth
You've got to take it slow
On the bumpy roads of youth
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No guts, no glory - that's your motto
You dare people to prove otherwise
You savor power without its trappings
You crave success at any price

Chorus:
***********************
But you want to break free
You want to do your thing
You want to let the world know
You'll stop at nothing

But you've got to learn to take
the rough with the smooth
You've got to take it slow
On the bumpy roads of youth
***********************

[Jim Colyer]

Pretty good, I thought. My first impulse was to think of "He's A Rebel," the old Crystals tune written by Gene Pitney. Yours is different. Keep writing.

Jim Colyer: Save The Planet http://publishamerica.com/books/10647

Save The Planet http://jimcolyer.com/@tracks/20/lofi.mp3

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[DeathsLove]

I like it! At first i was like..i couldnt see the rythm then i like sang it(not taking your song that how i understand lyrics) and i was like cool. Great Job! Do you have more stuff?

[JustRite]

I posted then forgot all about this thread! Thanks Jim, Deathslove. Anything I should change? Please critique this for me.

Deathslove, this is my one and only attempt. I am playing around with something else though. I will post it as soon as I am done (I am stuck after the first paragraph).


Thanks,