Help with action scene

[Parkinsonsd]

I just posted the first action scene in my current wip on the SYW board. If anyone would mind giving it a look and relaying any thoughts, I'd appreciate it.

I promise I won't rant and rave or even tell you what an incompetent twit you are.

http://http://www.absolutewrite.com/forums/showthread.php?p=1251085#post1251085