Metaphor

[kdnxdr]

Metaphor: a statement where one kind of object or idea is used in place of another to suggest analogy by implicit comparison: "Her lips are soft cushions."; “She has the scent of roses.”

 

[kdnxdr]

Sex is an endless mirage that can never quench the thirst for passion.

 

[Blarg]

"The moon was a ghostly galleon, sailing on silvery seas."

On the wall over the blackboard in my elementary school. Still inspiring today.

 

[kdnxdr]

Irritating, those little red-bug freckles, as if they were ever going to move.

 

[kdnxdr]

**Time out**

I just thought I would comment as to how interesting it is to me that over 100 people have looked at this thread but dared not attempt a metaphor!

What's up with that????????

Remember kids, practice makes perfect.

 

[Norman D Gutter]

FWIW, the OP doesn't ask us to try out a metaphor. It just gives a definition and examples.

I will add that I struggle with metaphor, but my best poems, in my own estimation, are those with the best metaphors.

NDG

 

[kdnxdr]

Hello Norman,

Thank you for pointing out that there's been no request for metaphor submissions in the thread. Earlier, in another thread, the idea came up and I just failed to make that clear in this one.

So, now it's clear, the thread is for the purpose of introducing a particular poetic skill and then afford the opportunity to anyone who would like to try their hand at using that skill.

So, have at it.....let's see some metaphors!!

 

[Billytwice]

"The moon was a ghostly galleon, sailing on silvery seas."

On the wall over the blackboard in my elementary school. Still inspiring today.

Sounds familiar?

'The moon was a ghostly galleon tossed upon cloudy seas'

From 'The Highwayman' by Alfred Noyes...

One of my favorites.

 

[Bartholomew]

"The moon was a ghostly galleon, sailing on silvery seas."

On the wall over the blackboard in my elementary school. Still inspiring today.

That's a slightly altered line from an Alfred Noyles poem called "The Highwayman."

ETA

I really need to start reading all the damn replies >_<

 

[Tbabbit]

Broken crayons
and not a single color
in the lines

 

[Blarg]

Astonishingly few metaphors in these lines.

 

[kdnxdr]

Blarg, let's see a metaphor.

 

[moth]

The screen door between us was a panel of stretched lace

The paper is a barrier

Fluffy bunnies are rainbows without much color




(okay I was being silly on that last one )

 

[Ambrosia]

I think you have never seen the full array of colors in bunnies. (but I like the line. )


He is a warm blanket, protecting me from love's winter chill.

 

[Blarg]

The squirrel was a whirlwind careening through the branches.

 

[kdnxdr]

Life is a crap shoot, roll a 7!

 

[moth]

Water is a sneaky weasel, creeping in where it's not allowed and can do the most damage.

(^^Is that actually a metaphor [because of the weasel reference]? Is there any rule that the thing you're comparing to has to be inanimate?)

 

[Ambrosia]

Yes, Moth, that is indeed a metaphor. An extremely apt one, as well.

 

[moth]

Thanks...wasn't sure. I like poetry and know some things about it, but I'm far from a pro or expert.

Another metaphor:
My grandmother, with her bitter and critical eye, is a red pen.

 

[kborsden]

FWIW, the OP doesn't ask us to try out a metaphor. It just gives a definition and examples.

Kid, why not link back to the original resource thread in future exercises to avoid confusion?

My example:

I am a hole in the textile from which your life is woven

 

[Magdalen]

After she hit age 30, the trainwreck that was her life ran out of steam and was shunted to a siding where it waits, idled but still blowing smoke.

 

[Blarg]

"There's more than one way to have sex!," he barked.

 

[Billytwice]

then a stroll
down to the water's edge
to the sewage works
pumping shit
into an eager sea

A metaphor so perfect
it took my breath away

 

[kdnxdr]

Kie, sorry for the long delay to reply.

Answer: Because I'm not so smart. Will you fix it for me?

kid

 

[Perscribo]

I’ll will forever miss my mother’s
laughter,
standing there,
watering her roses.