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yeah, i'd say a writer needs both. no one said you had to follow all the 'rules' all the time. the strong advocacy here is to know the 'rules' and when you deliberately break them there may or may not be consequences. the 'rule' camp, as far as i recall, never said never. the 'no rules' camp, in part, seems to advocate not even bothering to learn them.

'Actually, you ask a successful writer to fix something up, he doesn't go through it applying rules and taping measures. He skims through, rewording the way he would if he wrote it. It's not some scientific or legal process. It's all by the seat of the pants. Really. Honest. Seriously.' ~ jeez, j, two daze in a row? you're batting a .1000 in my book (<-- now that's good writing, folks). indeed, it is a kind of 'scientific' process, it's just one that writer has developed over years of practice, trial and error, and, indeed, knowing the rules. they just make it look easy. this whole paragraph is simply flawed from beginning to end. it's saying any professional writer merely has to skim any old piece of junk and due to some innate gift (and certainly by not sticking to any 'rules') can instantly and magickally transform lead into gold. bullshit, bullshit, bullshit. some writers can bang out a first draft very close to what the final version will be and sell it, while some won't even think about submission before they do eight drafts. if i asked a pro do 'skim' (and if i'm paying him, he'd damn well do more than skim) my story, he'd apply his own personal science, weights and measures. and that's not to say it would make the story better or worse, either. 'by the seat of his pants' even implies this professional was virtually born with skillz and gifts few others really have, that no effort is involved, that no training was ever necessary, and that professional writers have some kind of editorial virtue beyond that of mortal man. basically, i take your words to mean 'successful' writers don't even have to try, nor have they any need, now or ever, for 'rules.' that's absolutely ridiculous, and i hope anyone with a thimbleful of common sense sees the truth of things, that most 'successful' writers have indeed worked hard at their craft, so hard at it, in fact, that they merely only make it look easy. don't believe me if you don't want to, but i'm going to go out on a limb here and say that, yes, the vast, vast majority of successful writers know the rules. and i'd add that they've practiced all the rules in some form or another to see what worked for them and what didn't ~ i'd be surprised if the majority of successful (and by the term i assume that means a professional able to more or less sustain a livelihood by writing) writers would claim they don't know the rules or that they don't follow any rules whatsoever.

if you write out of ignorance, it's bound to sound like ignorant writing. if you want to point to danielle steel and the fact that literally nearly every one of her sentences contains the word 'and,' you can justify that. in fact, try that and see how far you get. if you're not danielle steel you might not get very far. who knows. ignore the fact that most of us were in grade school or not even born yet when her career started. ignore the fact that stephen king wrote under a pen name and had miserably sales until he 'leaked' his pen name and those books sold like crazy. ignore the fact that hemingway blew his brains out, poe was a drug addict, shakespeare in his own time wasn't considered particularly genius, and... well, you get the picture. i have a hard time believing herman melville will agree with people justifying ignorance (melville being one obsessed with his own work, hardly flying by the seat of his pants).

justify being ignorant, write like no 'rules' matter at any point. use as your basic reasoning some successful writer somehow managed to do it. point to every ridiculously rich and/or genius writer you can and consider yourself on their parr. you could just very well be the next dan brown. repeat to yourself that osmosis is all the training you need. know that all editors are failed writer wannabes, and that a rejection from them means they're just jealous (nevermind it's their job to publish marketable material, because, you know, editors love to publish junk they know will lose money. by the same token, all music producers are failed rock stars, all referees are failed quarterbacks, and everyone who owns a corvette has dreams of being the first middle-aged rookie in nascar. hell, let's just say christian fundamentalists are just failed porn stars, that makes as much sense). you know how to form a coherent sentence, that's all you really need to know. really. honest. seriously.

or you can learn the 'rules' and apply the ones that makes your writing better. do as thou wilt, so mete it be.

southern, i think my comment was tongue-in-cheek, eh? still, it had a kernal of truth to it. i've read enough blogs and articles, seen enough on these kinds of boards and have corresponded with enough professional writers to know it's not a lifestyle of ease and comfort, per se. i think the greatest benefit of being a professional writer must be doing something you love and the potential for 'greatness,' whatever that may be. i'm sure if a person is prolific enough they can have a comfortable life that affords them a great many freedoms and satisfactions. just that a book or two on the bookshelves at barnes and noble doesn't guarantee a future. not being the type of person who seeks ego gratification from seeing his name in print (although it's an awesome name), i honestly prefer not to write for my life lest it become a real job in itself. were i more creative, less lazy, and more prolific, and the money was right, maybe i'd consider it (though i don't think i could ever write well with the idea i was only doing it for a paycheck).

the simple fact is that when you discard all the 'rules' appropriate to the story you're not doing the story any services.

i'm simply blown away by the fact that there's any writer here who's actually defending ignorance. as i sit here right now, i wish i were the kind of person who knew better than to debate the point. as the old saying goes, don't argue with ignorant people, they'll just drag you down to their level and beat you with experience.
 

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'Osmosis is a really good way to pick up how to use a language, much better than memorizing grammar rules. If you've memorized a bunch of rules, you'll constantly have to think about whether you're breaking one. If you've learned by osmosis, you'll do it right without thinking about it, because you just know.' ~ uhhh.... hey, batta, batta, batta, suh-wing! can i use this as an argument to watch porn? 'but, sweetheart, 'assblasters III' is teaching me through osmosis how best to blast your ass. don't you want a good ass blasting? sweetheart, where are you going? sweetheart?'
 

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Yes, as long as it works. That's very correct. When you know to recognize what works and what doesn't, the rules are secondary.

No. When you know to recognize what works and what doesn't, you know the rules.

I got published without ever taking a single course on writing, or reading a single book on the subject.

I figured out the rules as I went along.

After I was published, I felt the pressure of professionalism, and read a few (very good) books on writing. What I learned, with few exceptions, was that I'd figured out the same rules as everyone else.

I might have saved myself some time by reading books on writing first, but considering how reactionary my personality is, figuring them out on my own might actually have been the fastest route...

In any case, the rules exist because they work. No rule applies all the time, but that doesn't disprove anything. Only if you know the rules and understand why they exist, can you make a valid judgment on whether they apply to any given situation.
 

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if you're writing with the express interest in getting published, the rules you use are, imo, determined by your target audience. the editor's job is to know the reader's expectations and provide product that appeals to them, product that follows readers' 'rules.' of course there are some publishers more willing than others to offer experimental or 'ground-breaking' material, but most of 'em would publish stephen king's grocery list knowing it'll sell, which is what they're in business to do.

i guess if 'rule' breaking is high on your list of priorities, you might as well strike out with that first and see if you get any bites. or write stuff to sell and then write stuff to satisfy your ego, the latter being stuff you hope to get published, but if not oh-well. i dunno, if you start off one way and drastically switch gears, i as a fan might be turned off, because i'm like anyone else, when i find something i like i want more of the same but different.

i don't know how true it is that established authors get to do whatever they want, necessarily. sure, maybe king is given a pretty wide berth, and a few others, but realistically that's such a small percentage it's not even worth considering, eh? most professional writers have to actually maximize their efforts, and i'd imagine more than one has written something more to pay the bills or fulfill a contractual obligation than having a burning desire to churn out another pulp novel for the always starving romance market or whatever. you gotta do what you gotta do to pay the bills, and i'd imagine most professional novelists can't afford to have that many misfires, so when insurance is due, your editor wants to know if you're going to make the deadline, and your inbox is full of glowing praise, how much sense is it likely going to make to start breaking rules? any professional novelist out there want to say how many times a royalty check has saved their ass? can't get royalties if no one buys the book. i don't think it'll take the ghost of clarence darrow to talk you out of continuing to produce proven sellable material, eh? lol.

i guess if you're exceptionally prolific you can work on some side projects and protect your professional name using a psuedonym (though it doesn't make any sense when books say 'so-and-so writing as joe bunko.' i mean, what the hell is the point of that?). then i suppose you can use whatever influence you've got to push something more experimental or some different style through. fans will buy your material sight unseen given the idea you provide them with a consistent product.

case in point: i once walked into a book store behind an old woman who i made hold the door open for me because i felt she should. she caught a passing clerk, stared into his dead eyes, and managed to croak out as she wobbled on her cane, 'do you have the new stephen king book? i don't know the name of it, but i wanted to buy one.' my attention drifted away upon the first uttered 'duh' and i caught the scent of some lost sluts tittering away in the lesbian aisle. anyhoo, the point is if she bought that new hardback at full price and it turned out to be something completely different than what she expected, she'd have had a stroke, perhaps necessitating a premature addition to our pauper's graveyard... but yet resulting in a nice garage sale where one might find a used cane and dog-eared collection of king books for cheap. i guess it's a circle of life thing in that regard.

i don't know, if you want to be a murderer like that, that's your business. someday the republicans will figure out a way to lock up you mass killers before you strike again.
 
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Preyer, :), after reading your post, the only "rule" I'd like you to try to apply is that sentences really should begin with a capital letter. <G> You seem to have a total aversion to caps. <G>

That said, this discussion is exactly why one of the most popular writing workshops I give is called "We Don't Need No Stinkin' Rules."

:)


An adverb is not evil in and of itself. Nor is "was." But multiple adverbs in most sentences weakens your writing. Too many sentences constructed using was weaken your writing.

Everything in moderation, folks. Even capital letters. <G>

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when i actually write, i pull out the keyboard with the shift keys intact. :)

here's the thing, susan, and you said it yourself basically, know the rules and know when to break 'em. it seems some people are saying rules are pointless and only stupid people use them, so there's no reason to learn them. using j's analogy of the 'rules' of how to hit a baseball, those rules exist to maximize a batter's chances of hitting the ball where he wants that ball to go. and then you practice those rules. a lot. if it doesn't work for you, it doesn't work, try something else, but to say 'rules' are just arbitary and meaningless is just wrong. that's not to say 'rules' are never altered to fit, but writing without 'rules' is rather a 'rule' in itself. 'rules' exist to provide consistency and efficiency, among other reasons. some folk feel 'rules' are anti-artistic. those people are wrong, imo. just have a real reason to write without 'rules' other than 'i don't want to take the time to learn them.' 'the only rule is there are no rules' is, imo, a very bad way to approach serious writing. it discounts the craft aspect entirely and reinforces the idea that just anyone can write the best story possible without effort.

i'm certainly not telling people how to write. i'm just saying know the 'rules' so you can perhaps write better where appropriate. i think that's all that's being said from 'our' side, no?
 

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when i actually write, i pull out the keyboard with the shift keys intact. :)

It's interesting to me how much it makes me stumble when trying to read your posts.

And I think *that's* one of the main part of what should be 'the rules." Do what makes it easier for your readers. Don't make them stumble.

Yes, you do need to KNOW the rules before you can break them. (That's part of my workshop.) And there are valid reasons for these rules. That's something else you need to know and understand before you can decide if breaking the rule is something GOOD for your work, or something lazy in your writing.

it discounts the craft aspect entirely and reinforces the idea that just anyone can write the best story possible without effort.

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Absolutely. Before the whole "dirt" came out, I tried to read Million Little Pieces by Fry. But I picked it up, opened it, and TRIED to read it -- but the man's total disregard for the basic structure of the English language turned me off immediately. It made me stumble. It made me put the book back on the shelf.

I'm sure he thought he was being "all that" with his structure, and there were many people willing to overlook that. I wasn't one of them. <shrug>

Susan G. - who believes rules are made to be broken, but only if you know WHY you are breaking them.
 

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it sounds as if we're in total agreement, susan. you may have just saved an octogenarian's life and me the trouble of opening my own doors. i'm sure the gravediggers' union will manage the temporary loss of work.
 

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An adverb is not evil in and of itself. Nor is "was." But multiple adverbs in most sentences weakens your writing. Too many sentences constructed using was weaken your writing.

Too much of anything weakens your writing. If it didn't weaken your writing, you wouldn't call it "too much". Figuring out how much is too much, now that's the tough part. And rule mongers either overshoot the mark by "Don't use X," or create a too strict system that regularises writing too much ("One every X words"), or are vague about it ("depends on the context").

Actually, I agree with the vague part, generally, but I also think that this kind of makes the rule pointless. Instead you could just say, "pay attention to your adverbs," but then there's no element of writing that doesn't deserve attention.

The time spent puzzling out what a rule means could be spent reading a grammar book that tells you what the element in question does, and how it can be applied. (How the passive voice police will hate this sentence!)

"Rules" remind me more of rumours: somewhere in there, there's a bit of truth, but to find it you need to go to the source. There are very few clear cut issues in writing.

Some writers go off on rules, others like to build their intuition. The intuitive folks are no more lazy than the rule-bound are stupid. People are different and that is that.

I'm with the intuition-crowd, because I feel that improving strengths is more important than weeding out weaknesses.

I also think developing your own learning techniques is (a) more enjoyable, and (b) more insightful than rule-based learning. (Learning technique example: Say you're interested in the difference between "past- and present-tense narration". Pick out your favourite books and put them all in the "other" tense; some stories are easier to transfer than others, some work equally well in both tenses, and some get garbled along the way to the point of becoming unreadable.)
 

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"Rules" remind me more of rumours: somewhere in there, there's a bit of truth, but to find it you need to go to the source. There are very few clear cut issues in writing.

'Zactly. :) But you've got to hang around here for a while before you come to grips with that. <G>

There is no ONE RIGHT WAY to do any of this. :)

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vague? what's vague about 'you're writing purple prose,' 'these verbs put the paragraph in a passive voice,' or 'you're telling instead of showing here'? these are the rules that people are suggesting aren't valuable to know. fix it or don't write as effectively, there's no intuition to it. you write better drafts not because an angel is sitting on your shoulder, but you've trained yourself. if you don't do it by rote, you do it because you recognize it could be done better until it becomes second nature.

are you serious when you say you ignore your writing weaknesses? please tell me you're joking.
 

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Oh, yeah! This is one of my pet peeves. :rant: I'm one of those people who blogs about "the rules," and especially about all the times I've seen published authors break them successfully. There's Susan Minot's Evening, which I think is a movie now, starring Meryl Streep. She uses no quotation marks whatsoever. Some sentences don’t even end in periods. It’s full of passive sentences and the use of “was.” She even has the protagonist get "out" (not off) of a guy's lap, and sit "in" (not on) a chair. Not the kind of cushy chair a person can sink into, but a kitchen chair. The same word is often repeated in the same sentence or the same paragraph. The effect is ethereal. It won an award (can’t find the specific one at this moment, sorry), and got rave reviews.

Then we have blogging agents tell us there are certain story beginnings that are too cliche to ever consider publishing: dream sequences, characters waking up in the morning, characters beginning their daily routine . . . Just about every publishing professional’s blog I read condemns these beginnings as amateur. Then one day I’m reading Anna Genoese’s blog, and in it, she praises author Alix Strauss who wrote The Joy of Funerals. I like the title, and I tend to follow those kinds of links to see what’s so hot about the writing that an editor or agent likes it well enough to promote it on his or her blog, so that’s what I did; I followed the link and began reading an excerpt. And guess what? It begins with a dream sequence, followed by the alarm going off, and the main character’s morning routine.

When I hear "rules" I’ve never heard before, I pull books from my shelves and thumb through them randomly to see if other authors have committed the same offense. One blogging editor used to have a cow whenever someone used the word "was." She said it’s telling, not showing. I pulled a pile of books from my shelf and scanned through them. And guess what again? Every one of the best-selling books I pulled was full of "was." I scanned a few pages at random, sent them to the blogging editor, and asked for clarification. New rule: don’t do that. It pisses them off.

I think it was the same editor who deplored the use of “and then,” in prose, labeling it "lazy and bad writing." This was a rule I had never heard before, so it remained fresh in my mind, and I began to see “and then” everywhere, when I had never noticed it before in my life.

Another rule of which I was unaware, concerns the use of “suddenly,” as in “suddenly, such and so happened.” And wouldn’t you know, as I opened books randomly in my search for "was," I saw it, plain as day, in Memoirs of a Geisha (page 87 in the paperback edition): “Then suddenly, from beyond where the rat was chewing, a head raised up and Hatsumomo was looking straight at me.” We have a “then suddenly,” and two “was.” Someone remind me. How many copies did this novel sell? How much money did Arthur Golden make from the movie deal?

It just so happened that on the same evening, I was catching up on entries in Kristin Nelson’s blog. As we all know, she’s probably one of the most influential agents in the business. On the 17th of July, 2006, she posted an entry, New York State of Mind, where she praised a particular author, and said if she were queried by someone who wrote as well as said author, she would sign them in a second. I followed the link to read an excerpt from Jody Picoult's Nineteen Minutes. She is good. Very good. But in that little excerpt, guess what I found? Go ahead. Guess. I found no less than five "and thens" in a short excerpt. I can almost guarantee every one of her books was edited by a professional editor who apparently didn’t give a damn about her use of “and then.”

The best rule in writing I've ever heard, and the only one I still try to follow is, "Write well. Query widely." ;)

You are my new hero!! You have made my day for the next month.
 

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write well... just don't use any of the 'rules' unless, of course, you happen to stumble across them on your own. lol. okay, how do you know if you're writing well if you don't know the difference between generally accepted 'good' writing and 'bad' writing? does reading someone *else's* book help you write better if you have no idea what you're supposed to be looking for? how does that work exactly? i guess taking a highlighter to a couple of books and ferreting out how description is done if that's one of your known weaknesses is a bad idea?

reading, while not a bad thing, is more or less pointless if you're not making a study of what you're reading, eh? is that even arguable?

over the years, i've critiqued plenty of people who got all huffy when you point out how their writing could improve. hey, guys, telling is telling and showing is showing and for people who don't know the difference, showing is only going to help the story nine times out of ten. there's not like a million miles of gray area between passive and active voice, but writers need to know the difference so they can use each effectively. i could on like this, but i'd think the reasons to know what the fuck you're doing is self-explanatory, especially when it's so many peoples' dream to be good at what they do. i don't expect a fifth grader to know the rules, but i damn well think a would-be professional would actually attempt to be knowledgeable about their craft. no one says you have to be grammar gawd or never use a single line of exposition, but, damn, if you're absolutely clueless about it, what do you think will happen when an editor gets it?
 

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I'm not going to deny that I find preyer to be somewhat acerbic. He's also right. Knowing your tools is vitally important, and that's what these rules are.

They're a combination of best practices and common terminology, and should be part of every writer's toolbox. You can't be a successful carpenter if you don't know the difference between a nail and a screw, and when to use one but not the other. It's hard to work with someone else if you don't know the names of the tools, too.

Part of learning these rules is learning how to communicate when discussing the craft. It would really suck if an editor said they would buy your piece if you could cut down on the passive voice and you didn't know what they meant. You don't need to obey all the rules all the time, but you do need to know what you're doing when you're doing it. Make your decisions deliberately. It's fine to learn by trial and error, but learn the commonly accepted best practices, so you know when you're breaking those rules.

When it comes to publication, you're going to have to work with people. Whenever you're doing something different people are likely to ask why. If you can't answer, if you can't discuss it, they aren't likely to pay you for your work.

I'm not saying you should always follow every rule slavishly, just that you should know when you're breaking them, or even when you're following them.
 

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Huh. Glad I could help. :) Should I ask why, or not?
Because you articulated, perfectly, what I've felt for awhile now. I think that grammar rules have their place (like the weather, it's good to know, but there are times you can get by without it) but I feel there comes a time when a writer gotta write what feels right. Every musician can't read music, but can carry a tune. Every writer don’t follow grammar rules, but (a good one) can show-don’t-tell, a story--well.
 

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The anonymous blogger claimed to be a book editor at a large publishing house. I would you send you a link to the post in the blog, but it's been closed for so long, it has disappeared.
Post the link (or look for it yourself with the following hints). The text may still be in Google's cache (search for a unique string of words from the blog), or in archive.org (put in the URL). Things may be harder to erase from the Internet than you suspect.
I can't wait until I'm the established author who gets to break all the rules.
Okay, I may well Write The Damn Book, my idea for a novel that Breaks The Rules. I don't mean breaking the too-many-adverbs or passive-voice rules or things like that, I mean the rules about plot. It's an exciting adventure, but it ends "wrong."

I'll later on write some "good" novels to get published and build a reputation, then when I'm established and the publishers will take just about anything with my name on it, I'll inflict this thing on my readers.

But I promise this: I won't turn a reviewer into a child molestor, or any stupid thing like that.
 

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are you serious when you say you ignore your writing weaknesses? please tell me you're joking.

Weeding out your weaknesses is important; building up your strengths is more important. That's what I'm saying. (But it depends on what kind of learner you are.)

Generally, when I'm expanding my strengths, I'll lose a few weaknesses along the way. That's because strengths and weaknesses are interconnected. (Come to think of it "more important" wasn't the best way to phrase it. "Methodologically more effective" would have been more accurate. [Tweedledum and Tweedledee, I agree Mr bird. If I understand correctly that is.])

vague? what's vague about 'you're writing purple prose,' 'these verbs put the paragraph in a passive voice,' or 'you're telling instead of showing here'? these are the rules that people are suggesting aren't valuable to know. fix it or don't write as effectively, there's no intuition to it.

There is intuition to it, and that people claim objectivity where there's taste is one of my chief gripes when it comes to "rules". I could write an article on each of those subjects, but I'll have to do inadequate summaries instead:

"purple prose": Where does "purple" start and "poetic" end? Is "purple" a derogatary term down-to-earth, no-nonsense people apply to head-in-the-clouds stylists? How do I know purple prose? Too many adjectives + adverbs? (If so, how many is too many?) "Purple Prose" is the mother vague.

"these verbs put the paragraph in a passive voice": The very way this is phrased illustrates the confusion. The passive voice is an attribute of verbs not paragraphs. A passive voice and the passive voice are somewhat related in that verbs in the passive voice are often said to contribute to a passive voice, but they're not the only ones. (Any instance of "to be" is a candidate; "there-is" constructions are quite high on that list...). So, what grammatical constructions are allowed? How often? The passive voice is easy to identify (well, not so much on the fringes where it spills into adjective territory, but that's another topic, really). A passive voice is hard to define clearly without kicking out grammatically necessary stuff.

"You're telling, instead of showing, here:" I've seen this one mean so many things: 1. Write a scene, not expostion. 2. 3rd limited, not 3rd omniscient. 3. Too little detail; I don't see it. 4. Too much detail; two, three attributes and I see it; more and I fall asleep. 5. ... // For "you're telling, not showing", there's almost always a better, more specific, way to put it.

you write better drafts not because an angel is sitting on your shoulder, but you've trained yourself. if you don't do it by rote, you do it because you recognize it could be done better until it becomes second nature.

Agree. But, see, once it becomes second nature, it also becomes hard to see what the "rules" you treasure mean to other people. Rules don't appear vague, because people stuff their intuitions into the pockets of vagueness the rules contain. And shall I say it again? People are different.
 

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Just my take, from observations and deductuion, and, probably, wishful thinking:

I think pretty much every vocation has their set of rules, and has certain groups who can break/straddle them, and other groups who can't.

The NBA:
I marveled in the 90s at how Michael Jordan could get away with bumping the person he defended, or got away with the extra step (only two are allowed without dribbling, for those not familiar), or with blatant hand-checking. He was back then considered one of the best ever. Today, he is arguably THE best. But when he played, the ref's usually gave him the benefit of the doubt, cuz he was Michale f'ing Jordan.

Now a rookie with a lot of hype--say someone taken with the first overall pick in the draft--might get some of the same beneficial calls from refs, but not many. He has to earn them. IOW, he has to show he belongs in the NBA, that he's got game, that he can succeed within the rules before he gets the benefit of the calls.

And the lonely rookie taken in the fourth round of the draft whom nobody's heard of? He'll likely get no friendly calls from refs. He's a rook. He's got to earn it. Once he proves he's one of the game's elite, or if he secures a steady role in the league for substantial years, he'll get more close calls his way. Not as many as Michael, but certainly more than this year's rookies.

You earn it by proving yourself.

Same in Baseball. A veteran star hitter will get a close pitch called a "ball" over a "strike" much more than a rookie would.

As a rookie writer, IMO, you have to show "them" you know the rules by abiding by them. I think if you master your first few chaps with page-turning success without having to break too many "rules" you will earn a reader's (ie, agent's or editor's) trust, and will be allowed to break more "rules" as the story unfolds, so long as the story is right for that reader and maintains its level of interest. And if that first novel is a success, I think you'll be able to do more structurally and grammatically with your following novel, and so forth. So long as you don't go over the cliff in regards to breaking rules, I think you earn your license to "break the rules" the more you are successful, and the more you prove you can write within the rules.

Like everything else, however, moderation is everything. If you break rules just for the sake of breaking them, I think you're in trouble. If there's good reason to do so, and you know that reason, and your agent or editor knows that you know that reason, you'll be fine.
 

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dawn, i think i didn't instill the spirit of those 'rules' well enough ~ had i done so, those wouldn't have seemed like vagueries. then again, if someone knows what passive voice is, you just have to point out to them they're using it and they'll correct it if that's their wont to do. likewise, if you say 'you're telling here,' the writer hopefully knows what you're talking about. if they don't, you tell them and/or provide a link that explains it better. what seems to pass for vague for you is providing a long education for me. that is, if i say you're telling, i explain how, you still don't understand, then research it or ask for clarification.

i can't force people to learn this stuff. so what if people don't learn at the same pace, anyway? i fail to see how that's got any bearing on anything ~ learning to write usually has a long learning curve.

i'm not sure how one goes about expanding their writing strengths. i guess i'd have to know specifics on that, else i can't see how a person who writes in a naturally active voice gets better at that and it helps their punctuation. but, i can see where someone who sucks at punctuation can learn how to do that better by directly reviewing the 'rules' on that.

some 'rules' are better than others. purple prose is one of those. that's one that's got a greater gray area than most. no one said there's a formula to that one, it's rather the context in which it's used. i'd say purple prose is usually obvious... when i read some overwrought nonsense that makes me laugh, you can bet it's purple prose. is that intuitive? i wouldn't say so, but that's just me: i think the craft has a lot more objectivity to it than most writers care to admit because writers like to consider themselves artists.

and so do musicians, since that analogy was brought up. your typical studio musician knows music theory and how to read music. it's part of their job. there are as many 'rules' and formulas in music as there are in telling effective stories. the vast majority of music on the radio follows a structural formula in the arrangement of choruses and verses to chord progressions to key changes. it's hardly random. you can learn it 'by ear'... or you can spend a little time learning the hows, why's and therefores. some do it by ear and think they're onto something without knowing they could have short-cutted the process with two minutes of research. i mean, who do you think has more epiphanies, the moderately educated or the thinking ignorant? lol. when you're trying to write commercial music, like writing commercial stories, use the 'rules' your audience expects you to use. a room full of knuckleheads, none of whom can read a single note of music, is pretty likely to sound pretty terrible. who do you want playing your birthday party, a thrash band with three chords in their arsenal or a group of guys steeped in theory (and ostensibly practice)?

and there i think is a good alternative to using the word 'rules' in this context, learn your writing 'theory.' or bang out your three chords and hope your energy alone pulls you through. for every 'wild thing' by the troggs there are a thousand jokers out there without a clue sitting at a fork in the road waiting on the devil and praying that they'll be the next ramones. (i hurt my own argument here: the troggs continued giving a lot of straightforward songs, but they were victims of progressive rock bands who broke a rule or two here and there. while there's a lot of merit to stuff by bands like yes and frank zappa and the mothers, i'm hard-pressed to believe their basic mindset was one of commercial success (though each example was steeped in music theory). so, i'm not saying breaking the rules won't sell: what i'm saying is if commercial success is indeed your goal, the chances are greatly diminished if you break rules you don't know exist. i give you as an example christopher paolini... uh, wait, scratch that one....)

sorry, dawn, i just don't buy into the whole hippy notion of being 'intuitive' over being educated on the theory of writing. i just don't get that. i don't buy into the notion that the average working professional musician doesn't know how to read music or the grand slam hitter has never taken advice from a batting coach, either.
 

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dawn, i think i didn't instill the spirit of those 'rules' well enough ~ had i done so, those wouldn't have seemed like vagueries. then again, if someone knows what passive voice is, you just have to point out to them they're using it and they'll correct it if that's their wont to do. likewise, if you say 'you're telling here,' the writer hopefully knows what you're talking about. if they don't, you tell them and/or provide a link that explains it better. what seems to pass for vague for you is providing a long education for me. that is, if i say you're telling, i explain how, you still don't understand, then research it or ask for clarification.

i can't force people to learn this stuff. so what if people don't learn at the same pace, anyway? i fail to see how that's got any bearing on anything ~ learning to write usually has a long learning curve.

Okay, this is going to be difficult. I think that no amount of education can expell the vagueness from the rules. Actually, I think the more education you get the more vague those "rules" become, because you're more aware of the intricacies and complications. But I also fear that those "rules" function as pit-traps that hinder further education.

Let's say you encounter the rule "don't use the passive voice", before you know what the "passive voice" is. You then research the passive voice, but it already has a "don't" attached. Now, since in a lot of cases the passive voice is entirely appropriate, this can cause confusion. The correct path would be to discard the rule while researching the passive voice. But - often - people don't. The result is that people see a passive verb, but they think it can't be a passive verb, because they feel it works.

People are good at making up ad-hoc theories. They'll gather all the stuff that they - intuitively, mind you - think doesn't work and use the term "passive voice" to refer to it, while at the same time allowing for exceptions.

So, instead of looking at "the passive voice", what happens is that they've mapped their own tastes (dos and don'ts) onto someone else's terms. What they haven't done is look at the passive voice and how it works.

The thing is that they do improve their writing along the way, because - after all - they were turning their eye onto the things they were doing. So it's perfectly possible to have a writer with an editing-rule that works for him; but this does not translate into a good critiquing rule, if the person being critiqued has different tastes, or goes to the source and gets a different impression.

I do think it's the "don't" that messes with the learning. You're not primarily looking at the passive voice; you're looking at something that doesn't work. I do think this explains why so many people think that the past tense progressive is the passive voice (this is because they've expanded the grammatical item into a broader stylistic item), and why even experts sometimes call it that.

(And to compound the complication: Strunk's "Use the Active Voice" is a different rule from "Don't Use the Passive Voice"; at least I think so after analysing said rule for about half a year.)

I do think you should describe first, evaluate second. And evaluations should be left to the writer. Rules, when thrust at beginning writers, reverse this. This causes the rules either to become vague but workable rule-of-thumbs, or precise and oppressive (restricting your choices, or - worse - convincing you that you've got bad taste).

I am convinced that you become a better writer if you discover the underpinnings of your own taste rather than if you (a) bend a rule to your liking, or (b) bow to "received wisdom".

i'm not sure how one goes about expanding their writing strengths. i guess i'd have to know specifics on that, else i can't see how a person who writes in a naturally active voice gets better at that and it helps their punctuation. but, i can see where someone who sucks at punctuation can learn how to do that better by directly reviewing the 'rules' on that.

I'm going to sit out on that one, basically because there's no "one-size-fits-all" answer to that. As you said, we'd need specifics. (Btw, I do doubt that "voice", taken as the grammatical concept, has any influence on punctuation. But if "voice", the stylistic concept, has anything to do with the ordering and presentation of thoughts, that could have an impact on punctuation, as punctuation aids that very process.)

I realise I'm being vague. ;)

(Btw, one of my favourite unpublished writers is bad at punctuation. I can always tell when she's had a critique. Her puncuation gets better, but the prose turns dull. Heh! Talk about a viscious circle. Me, I'd rather have the garbled punctuation; easier to take care of in an edit.)

when i read some overwrought nonsense that makes me laugh, you can bet it's purple prose. is that intuitive? i wouldn't say so, but that's just me: i think the craft has a lot more objectivity to it than most writers care to admit because writers like to consider themselves artists.

If you're not figuring out that it's purple prose before you dare laugh, the response is intuitive. What you seem to assume is that there's a regularity in the response of readers that is objective.

If so, I'd argue that this is a question for the marketing department, not for the writer. I'd argue that if "craft prejudice" goes against taste, the text suffers. There's going to be someone who's better at writing the way you're forced to. This has nothing to do with art. Perhaps I'm strange like that, but most of the time I see an edited text on the web, the original held more appeal.

some do it by ear and think they're onto something without knowing they could have short-cutted the process with two minutes of research.

Does it really work like that? Theoretical knowledge isn't the same as practical knowledge. And some people won't understand theory until they've done "it" themselves.

I'm skeptical of short-cuts, really. Knowing about theory can save you the embarassment, though, of thinking you've come up with something "new and original".

(That's one of the things: often, competent writers aren't "breaking rules", they're using standard techniques. But the rule-mongers can't admit that, or their rules would lose value.)

i mean, who do you think has more epiphanies, the moderately educated or the thinking ignorant? lol.

The moderately educated. (But education, ideally, involves tool-description, not rule internalisation.)

when you're trying to write commercial music, like writing commercial stories, use the 'rules' your audience expects you to use. a room full of knuckleheads, none of whom can read a single note of music, is pretty likely to sound pretty terrible. who do you want playing your birthday party, a thrash band with three chords in their arsenal or a group of guys steeped in theory (and ostensibly practice)?

Can-of-worms alert!

Only a passing comment to keep this thread from exploding: I don't think there's that much of a difference between "commercial" and "artistic". I think it's a false distinctions. Plenty of "artistic" stuff does well, and plenty of "commercial" stuff bombs. I'm not sure this has anything to do with "rules".

and there i think is a good alternative to using the word 'rules' in this context, learn your writing 'theory.' or bang out your three chords and hope your energy alone pulls you through.

Well, most people probably do a little bit of both at the same time. This is what makes the issue so convoluted.

sorry, dawn, i just don't buy into the whole hippy notion of being 'intuitive' over being educated on the theory of writing. i just don't get that. i don't buy into the notion that the average working professional musician doesn't know how to read music or the grand slam hitter has never taken advice from a batting coach, either.

Nothing to be sorry about.

And once again: I'm not arguing education over intuition. I'm arguing that rules are backed mostly by intuition and pose an obstacle to education.

Or differently put: read about the passive voice, forget about the don't. Then realise that evaluation is pointless without intuition. It's bad, but I like it? I don't think so. You all dislike it, but I still like it? Possible. Tough luck. (If it's a minor issue, change it against your "better/worse" judgement; if it's a major issue, place it in a drawer and hope for a change in popular taste. Sell something else.)

[Btw, "reading music" is the equivalent of "reading text", although being an "illiterate musician" is a lot easier than being an "illiterate writer" [these days you can dictate it onto tape, but still...]. The writing-rule equivalent in music, the thing I'm talking about at least, is something like "Don't use parallel fifths". I wouldn't believe that either, especially since a lot of "rock music" is based on parallel fifths. Heh.]
 

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nice post, but i think you're over-complicating it. the rules/guidelines/theory/craft, whatever you want to call it, is/are there to make the writing better, and nine out of ten times it probably does. if someone doesn't quite understand, say, passive voice, its caveats and boons, being told why and why not as it pertains to a specific story is only going to help. the writer then agrees with it or they don't, and once they finally understand it, that's when they can use it appropriately. what you seem to refer to as intuition, i call rote.

another 'rule' is avoid cliches like having the MC look into a reflective surface so the writer can do a description or start the story off in a dream/waking up. can you break these 'rules' and still have a good story? of course, but not only do you risk the wrath of the editor, you're not being creative. you might think you're being creative because you've never heard of the cliche, but who's fault is that?

purple prose is by nature a bit trickier, a bit more subjective. still, it's usually pretty obvious to an experienced eye.

i still aver that if you don't know what you're looking for, you don't know what you're looking at. because so many writers are self-taught, they definitely need solid guidance. this, imo, is why critiques are helpful, because you can read a 'rule' a hundred times, but often you might not truly grasp it until someone points out that you've 'broken' it.

i've done hundreds of critiques over the years, and i can't recall a single one where there's been absolutely no consideration or knowledge of the rules and the original being better than the revision after the passive voice has been rooted out, ridiculous adverbs and flowery adjectives have been snipped, unnecessary dialogue tags slashed, etc.. it hardly ruined whatever artistic quality there was, it just made what's there more readable. most of the writers i see have no editing technique whatsoever. does that lead to effective writing? not in my book. nor does the idea 'editing? we don't need no stinkin' editing!' appear as advice from *any* professional's corner i've ever seen.

i can't say how everyone should go about learning these things, just that everyone will either learn them at some point and the sooner the better. i really don't see the huge advantage of stumbling over a 'rule' after years of reading as opposed to being told the 'rule' up front. i'd think most writers would want those years back so they could put the 'rule' in practice (if they choose to use it).

i can't think of an analogy that supports the other side's viewpoint. rock, country, the blues and pop music almost always follow the exact same patterns. of course, someone could say that 'stairway to heaven' doesn't, but the point is those guys were drenched in the 'rules' and were highly educated about the theory. they just didn't wing it and out popped a masterpiece. but, yeah, any schmuck can pick up a guitar and within an hour bang out power chords that sounds something like 'smoke on the water' just like any slob can pick up a pen and practice their native language and wind up with a story of sorts.
 

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Just read one of the books that inspired my original post

.....and it's an incredible book! Full of suspense, couldn't put it down. I expected that much, since it was one of the Edgar nominees for "Best First Novel."

"Sharp Objects" by Gillian Flynn.

But what I didn't expect was the artful use of language. Really powerful. Also psychologically very astute. Disturbing, though. So be warned!

The back cover blurb gives you the set up: female MC is a reporter at a second rate Chicago paper, fresh from a short stay in a psychiatric hospital, and sent back to her home town to investigate the murder of two preteen girls. A very arresting cover (paperback version): black, with a shiny silver razor in the middle.

One of those novels that shouldn't be categorized, since there's always the risk that someone who "doesn't like mysteries/suspense" will pass it by.

Highly recommended!

Now I'll go read the others mentioned in the article.

Had no idea my original post would generate so much fascinating discussion!

--Susan


Exactly! That's the point.

But some of the sources you read can put new writers (like me) in a panic about using any of those things I mention. Ever. Or at least in the opening pages of a book, where it would be grounds for an agent to stop reading. (The agent who wrote "The First Five Pages" does say this. A useful book, though, for self-editing.)

So it served as a reminder to me to maintain a little perspective. Thought others might appreciate it.

(No, haven't yet read any of the books, just bought one of the books mentioned. Just found the article recently.)

Susan
 
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