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Here's part of the story about Treasure Chest, it's only rough. I'm not looking for crit, but feel free to comment.
Here's part of the story about Treasure Chest, it's only rough. I'm not looking for crit, but feel free to comment.
Soul Bite
Chapter 1
It was a bitter night in London, especially in the tube station where Treasure sat. Treasure, a strange name for a fourteen-year-old girl. It was the real name her vile, repulsive parents had given her before abandoning her and Gemma, her sister, when she was two, and Gemma was seven.
Treasure Chest groaned as she awoke from her sleep and stretched out her strains and the colossal stitch that’d pinned itself to her hip for no apparent reason.
She rubbed her reddening eyes and pulled back her eyelids to try and wake herself up - no luck.
Treasure stumbled as she heaved her body to a standing position worthy of even a homeless person. She picked up her tatty old rucksack and trudged slowly along the tiled floor of the station. Her jeans were too small, and the gap between her skin and the material was just big enough for a gentle breeze to ruffle the hairs on her slender, yet bruised legs. Her rucksack - if it was quality enough for that name - was decorated with mud, and in only a few select areas was it clear what the previous colour of the bag was - aqua blue.
The girl in question was not an ugly girl, however. Yes, she was stinky from lack of wash, yep, she definitely had messy, frizzy black hair and major acne, but something gave her face mysteriousness and a curious type of beauty. Almost everyone realised this was the eyes she had.
They were royal blue, the same colour as her drunkard mother’s, and they didn’t just shine - they glimmered like beautiful sapphires. Treasure didn’t always feel worthy of them when she looked into the greasy mirrors of the underground.
The station, in question, was near Buckingham Palace. This was unusual for Treasure, as she usually spent the night somewhere else; the girl had no money, but being without dosh had helped her learn the ‘tricks of the trade’ of pick-pocketing, stealing and basically thievery. It wasn’t right, and she knew it, but she was not staying in a kids’ home; that was one of the reasons she’d escaped.
She arrived at the outside of the tube station, having successfully avoided several CCTV cameras, a dozen or so cops and the ticket machines that Treasure had learnt how to outwit in her spare time.
She had a lot of spare time.
Treasure bounced gracefully onto a high stone fence, then walked along the beam of stone, placing each foot down, perfectly practised. The girl was very thin, but not from lack of food. Oh no. She was very well fed.
She balanced herself along to the end, and then grabbed a near branch and swung herself onto a higher branch. She grinned, flashing surprisingly white teeth. She sniffed the air for the scent of Saturday: Roast potatoes, pork, vegetables and scrummy chocolate pudding.
Treasure clambered upon to a higher branch and edged onto the nearby ledge of the building and her source of food: The Sword and Stone restaurant.
She licked her lips and proceeded onto the roof of the grand building. Through the window on top, Treasure could see folk eating happily, mainly all ones with high-class apartments, probably.
The aroma was tantalising and mouth-watering; she could not help herself from dribbling on the pane of glass. She quickly rubbed it off, then carried on around the corner of the building.
Treasure stumbled slightly.
“It’s that bloody girl again, Mildred!”
“I’m gonna kill ‘er one day!”
Treasure stifled a giggle; they’d never catch her. Old Mrs McGregor and Mister Black wouldn’t get past the garden fence with their festering ancient legs.
She peered into the upstairs kitchen. How convenient; all the trays were lined up against the window.
As a waitress went to get some of the food, she ducked out of sight. When she could no longer hear any kerfuffle, Treasure bobbed back up and creaked open the window, taking the nearest plate and moving swiftly out of the view of the window, shovelling the food into her mouth.
Although the food was all still white hot, Treasure kept filling her face. The food tasted delicious every day.
“I need five roasts NOW!”
The girl rolled her eyes. Mike again.
When she’d finished her meal, Treasure moved back to the window and hissed to the chef, “Mike!”
The black haired twenty-year-old turned and smiled reluctantly as he noticed Treasure. “You rascal, you’ll get it one day!”
Treasure grinned. Mike’s Italian accent was music to her ears.
“Go on, here’s your pudding.”
Treasure enjoyed her chocolate pudding, then handed the dish back to her friend. “Thanks, Mikey.”
“Any time, rascal.”
“Bye!”
“Cya tomorrow.”
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