I have one MC, the only POV character in the story. This is NOT going to be in first person, no way, no how, but he does make a lot of mental comments about other characters and situations. IE, he only says about half of what he thinks. Kinda repressed.
Anyway, just looking for thoughts: should I continue to italicize his internal thoughts, or would you be comfortable if I simply left them the same as the rest of the text? Example:
With
“Oh?” Okay, now it was awkward. Yes, the gift was mine. No, that doesn't automatically make us best friends.
Without
“Oh?” Okay, now it was awkward. Yes, the gift was mine. No, that doesn't automatically make us best friends.
Anyway, just looking for thoughts: should I continue to italicize his internal thoughts, or would you be comfortable if I simply left them the same as the rest of the text? Example:
With
“Oh?” Okay, now it was awkward. Yes, the gift was mine. No, that doesn't automatically make us best friends.
Without
“Oh?” Okay, now it was awkward. Yes, the gift was mine. No, that doesn't automatically make us best friends.