Query exercise from an Agent

MacAllister · Apr 12, 2009

This is really smart, and worth practicing, and practicing, and practicing again -- then applying towards trying to write your own hook. This is so damn smart, I really, really wish I'd thought of it.

Colleen Lindsay ran a twitter query contest on her blog in January. That's well worth checking out, too, even though it's over.

You guys game to try it with your own queries? I'll give it a go, if you will.

*g*

Polenth · Apr 12, 2009

I don't have a full query yet, but here's my Twitter version:

When a man and his cockroach spirit guide are exiled, they join a search for a missing scientist in hopes of finding a new home on the way.

nayner · Apr 12, 2009

Polenth said:
I don't have a full query yet, but here's my Twitter version:

When a man and his cockroach spirit guide are exiled, they join a search for a missing scientist in hopes of finding a new home on the way.

you had me at "cockroach spirit guide"

Bluegate · Apr 13, 2009

Polenth said:
I don't have a full query yet, but here's my Twitter version:

When a man and his cockroach spirit guide are exiled, they join a search for a missing scientist in hopes of finding a new home on the way.

Please tell me you entered this? A cockroach spirit guide??? OMG how funny is that? :roll:

MacAllister · Apr 13, 2009

Crap...this is HARD.

Okay:

Matt's family ghosts ally with his ex, frame him for felony assault, thrusting him into a search for answers to questions he's afraid to ask

(Not precisely grammatical...)

And Polenth's cockroach spirit guide for the win!

Kathleen42 · Apr 13, 2009

I'd forgotten how hard this was:

When her best friend is infected with Lupine Syndrome, Mac is caught between loyalty and the most dangerous anti-werewolf group in the US.

Matera the Mad · Apr 13, 2009

A young shaman abandons all hope to seek justice for others, then battles an ancient evil to defend those who have given him a new lease on life.

There -- I do have one brain cell working yet tonight...I think

MacAllister · Apr 13, 2009

Wow, I actually like that quite a lot, Matera. Sort of elegant and simple, but with potential packed into every word

trocadero · Apr 14, 2009

I'm going to play with this tomorrow - what a brilliant exercise! Thanks for sharing.

Matera the Mad · Apr 14, 2009

T Y, O Great One

SarahMacManus · Apr 16, 2009

I can't DO it!!!

*sobs*

MacAllister · Apr 16, 2009

Sarah, what have you got? We'll help you pare it down and shine it up. *g* It's why we're all here.

Query exercise from an Agent

MacAllister

Tired and worried.

Polenth

Mushroom

nayner

Needs more sleep.

Bluegate

Clearly has too much time on hand.

MacAllister

Tired and worried.

Kathleen42

crushing on fictional characters

Matera the Mad

Bartender, gimme a Linux Mint

MacAllister

Tired and worried.

trocadero

Matera the Mad

Bartender, gimme a Linux Mint

SarahMacManus

MacAllister

Tired and worried.