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Post the first 3 sentences of your WIP!
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From something that's not exactly a WIP -- the first half-chapter or so came at me in a rush, and then nothing. I'm letting it simmer.
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I just wrote this last night. The first three sentences of my third novel.
Audwin sat, arms crossed, with his legs dangling over the summit. The pre-dawn sky reflected grayish-blue off the glassy-green surface of Sunrise Sea. Behind him, whistling and squawking and squeaking calls of birds and other forest dwellers formed a chorus that welcomed the new day.
Audwin sat, arms crossed, with his legs dangling over the summit. The pre-dawn sky reflected grayish-blue off the glassy-green surface of Sunrise Sea. Behind him, whistling and squawking and squeaking calls of birds and other forest dwellers formed a chorus that welcomed the new day.
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Fame<Infamy's opening 3
Loved Fame<infamy's opening sentances. Flowing, descriptive without too many fillers.
Loved Fame<infamy's opening sentances. Flowing, descriptive without too many fillers.
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My first three lines. Pretty brief! Doesnt tell you a lot...
“What the hell are you doing here?” My brother Jared was not pleased to see me at his friend’s party. “Who invited you?”
“What the hell are you doing here?” My brother Jared was not pleased to see me at his friend’s party. “Who invited you?”
It never fails. At least once a week, for the past few months I wake up thirsty.
Now I know there isn't a monster under my bed. I know this.
Now I know there isn't a monster under my bed. I know this.
I wish I could tell you there were such things as happy endings. Unfortunately, I'd then have to lie and say the boogie man doesn't lurk under the bed, and Santa isn't actually a pagan god who collects the souls of naughty children. The problem with fairy tales is they never were meant to be vomit- inducingly happy.
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Very interesting Varthikes, I like it. And yes Meadow yours doesn't tell alot, but it is intrigueing!
Here's mine:
I was born with this curse. From day one I was able to see things that any normal person couldn’t, and from day one I was forced to keep it a secret. If I were to look for one second too long at their abnormally sharp angled, beautiful faces, they would kill me, and they wouldn’t do it quickly either.
Here's mine:
I was born with this curse. From day one I was able to see things that any normal person couldn’t, and from day one I was forced to keep it a secret. If I were to look for one second too long at their abnormally sharp angled, beautiful faces, they would kill me, and they wouldn’t do it quickly either.
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Ooooh! Me too, Miss Endless! Very intriguing!!!!
I wanna read more.
Heres the first three, but you will need the rest to understand it.
Have you ever had one of those times when you wish that you had never done something? You know, one of those “If Only” moments where you say that you should not have done whatever it was that you were doing. Even if it was following orders.
Well, I know I have. In fact that’s how I feel right now. Like, it’s not even a joke. I was supposed to have a regular day at home, with nothing to worry about except parties, my dad, my girlfriend, and…..that’s pretty much it. That was, until I came home today and found myself up to my neck in small and deadly monsters.
Have you ever had one of those times when you wish that you had never done something? You know, one of those “If Only” moments where you say that you should not have done whatever it was that you were doing. Even if it was following orders.
Well, I know I have. In fact that’s how I feel right now. Like, it’s not even a joke. I was supposed to have a regular day at home, with nothing to worry about except parties, my dad, my girlfriend, and…..that’s pretty much it. That was, until I came home today and found myself up to my neck in small and deadly monsters.
“That is one psychedelic hickey you’ve got there,” Dawn said, greeting her friend Carmen at the front door of her farmhouse. Carmen put a hand around her neck protectively and cringed at her friend’s observation. She wasn’t embarrassed.
Of course, sentence four explains WHY she wasn't embarrassed...
Of course, sentence four explains WHY she wasn't embarrassed...
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Thanks! That is a very nice compliment
Now I just need to make sure every line is just as catching to "catch" an agent.
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this is a fun little exercise. Well, here you go.
What ya think
Mel...
I like it, kinda reminds me of Space Odyssey. I guess Claire3 is his android wife.
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Yeah, may have to change them. I read somewhere that starting with a quote was overdone.
Meh, don't have to worry about them before finishing the alphas.
From my fantasy WIP, very rough because this is my first draft:
[FONT="]She could not remember being taken from her parents and smuggled onto the island, but she knew it happened. She had been told the story until she could easily recite each step of the journey herself. Instead of play, there was always study, and her own history was as important a subject as any other.[/FONT]
[FONT="]She could not remember being taken from her parents and smuggled onto the island, but she knew it happened. She had been told the story until she could easily recite each step of the journey herself. Instead of play, there was always study, and her own history was as important a subject as any other.[/FONT]
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