How much "real time" info should I include here...

[MoLoLu]

I haven't read the whole thread but my basic instinct is:

- How much would your character be focused on each relationship?
- How much do you need to say to move the story along?

My personal experience is to add some additional information but focus on what needs to be said. If the brother simply doesn't need to be mentioned so much and is not the object of thought most of the time, there's no need to over-emphasize it.

If however the story revolves around both relationships being equally footed despite the character's thoughts, that will probably not be the best solution and you'll have to mention them equally.

All depends on what you're trying to say and what impression the reader's supposed to be left with.

[JennieRose8]

Originally Posted by MoLoLu

I haven't read the whole thread but my basic instinct is:

- How much would your character be focused on each relationship?
- How much do you need to say to move the story along?

My personal experience is to add some additional information but focus on what needs to be said. If the brother simply doesn't need to be mentioned so much and is not the object of thought most of the time, there's no need to over-emphasize it.

If however the story revolves around both relationships being equally footed despite the character's thoughts, that will probably not be the best solution and you'll have to mention them equally.

All depends on what you're trying to say and what impression the reader's supposed to be left with.

Originally, I'd intended for the relationships to be equally footed, but I'm just not feeling it. You know how it is when you're trying to force your character to do something or like someone and you can just tell they wouldn't go along with it?
It's that sort of thing.

So I guess she likes the brother and wants to try and get her mind off the teacher, but it ain't flyin'. LOL