Tally, I'm thinking of taking another leaf out of your book and doing a mock query in my notebook for TFL. Tips?
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Well, credit for me knowing this goes to katiemac.
First paragraph, tell us what your protagonist wants. Make it concrete. Something tangible.
Second paragraph, tell us what your protagonist must do to get that. Again, something specific. Instead of "prove his worth", "run up the mountain, kill a dragon and save the damsel in distress." Also, give us the stakes.
Get a bit of voice, but not too much. Don't start at the beginning of the novel, start at the beginning of the plot. Keep it tight. Make us care.
First paragraph, tell us what your protagonist wants. Make it concrete. Something tangible.
Second paragraph, tell us what your protagonist must do to get that. Again, something specific. Instead of "prove his worth", "run up the mountain, kill a dragon and save the damsel in distress." Also, give us the stakes.
Get a bit of voice, but not too much. Don't start at the beginning of the novel, start at the beginning of the plot. Keep it tight. Make us care.
OK. I'll try and write it later (bit difficult at the moment -- on the sofa; laptop; notebook = not enough space sometimes -- and I'll see how I go.
ETA: Does anyone have any suggestions for contempary Cinderella retellings?
ETA: Does anyone have any suggestions for contempary Cinderella retellings?
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The point of writing a mock query before writing a book is to figure out the emotional tension, the stakes, the story arc, the climax, etc. For example:
My nanowrimo craptastic mock query.
It would never, ever go out to an agent. I was actually just writing a summary for someone when it turned into this. But here's the thing:
I now know that at the start of my novel, Harmony knows nothing-- but that it doesn't last for very long. I know that, in the time she doesn't have any idea who she is, I have to set up the understanding that elemental magic is unique to the royal family, and that the princess disappeared. I have to set up the Empire's fall and how it was received, and what the new regime is like. And I have to do so in the first 15k or less, while still creating tension.
I need to set up the mythology of the dragons, leaving little hints from the beginning. I have the advantage of having a narrator who doesn't know anything more than the reader does, but I cannot use that as an excuse to infodump.
I have to make it clear from the beginning of the book that what Harmony wants more than anything isn't even to have a family-- it's just to remember them. I have to make the fact that this little girl wants nothing more than to remember being loved as heartbreaking as it is. And so when Khror shows up to offer the memories, the reader has to know without a word of explanation from me how desperately Harmony wants them and how torn she is.
My nanowrimo craptastic mock query.
It would never, ever go out to an agent. I was actually just writing a summary for someone when it turned into this. But here's the thing:
I now know that at the start of my novel, Harmony knows nothing-- but that it doesn't last for very long. I know that, in the time she doesn't have any idea who she is, I have to set up the understanding that elemental magic is unique to the royal family, and that the princess disappeared. I have to set up the Empire's fall and how it was received, and what the new regime is like. And I have to do so in the first 15k or less, while still creating tension.
I need to set up the mythology of the dragons, leaving little hints from the beginning. I have the advantage of having a narrator who doesn't know anything more than the reader does, but I cannot use that as an excuse to infodump.
I have to make it clear from the beginning of the book that what Harmony wants more than anything isn't even to have a family-- it's just to remember them. I have to make the fact that this little girl wants nothing more than to remember being loved as heartbreaking as it is. And so when Khror shows up to offer the memories, the reader has to know without a word of explanation from me how desperately Harmony wants them and how torn she is.
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Hey everyone!
I just came up with yet another idea for NaNo. Ack...I can't stop coming up with ideas!
I just came up with yet another idea for NaNo. Ack...I can't stop coming up with ideas!
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A synopsis might be better at this point. I usually work better with one though I'm winging it now. I've past the 30k mark!!!!
I actually really liked Another Cinderella Story. The male lead was really charismatic IMO. He should be in more things.
I actually really liked Another Cinderella Story. The male lead was really charismatic IMO. He should be in more things.
What's this idea?
Has anyone heard of the band ALL TIME LOW? One of their songs gave me the name for my MC and the LI. Now I need some more names for the 'Barbie Brigade' and the best friend.
Has anyone heard of the band ALL TIME LOW? One of their songs gave me the name for my MC and the LI. Now I need some more names for the 'Barbie Brigade' and the best friend.
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lisa - Well, I was listening to Coldplay's latest song "Princess of China" and then bam...this idea for a sorta spy, international thriller story hit me.
It's basically about a girl who goes through life "invisible". She has this software installed in her brain that makes it hard for people to pay much attention to her. So she can easily rob grocery stores and malls without anyone noticing her and she can sit in a classroom without the teacher or other students knowing she's there. Then one day a boy follows her back to her "hideout" and...stuff happens.
Haha. That's all I have for now.
It's basically about a girl who goes through life "invisible". She has this software installed in her brain that makes it hard for people to pay much attention to her. So she can easily rob grocery stores and malls without anyone noticing her and she can sit in a classroom without the teacher or other students knowing she's there. Then one day a boy follows her back to her "hideout" and...stuff happens.
Haha. That's all I have for now.
Maria and Alex (I've wanted to use this name for ages, but there's an emotional attachment to it, for personal reasons).
I like your name. Can I steal it for the best friend?
I like your name. Can I steal it for the best friend?
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