Beta Needed for 28k Coming of Age Novella

dogpie · 11-20-2012, 01:54 PM

This is my first time asking for a beta (who isn't someone I know), so here it goes.

My story is a 28k coming of age contemporary novella about a lonely 19 year old guy who never seems to have things go his way. He has a knack for using the internet too much, and seeing the internet as if it were the real world around him. But when he meets the love of his life online, he loses touch of the real world. That, and the secret he hides from himself.

This is a very introspective story, and there are crude words, but not very many. I'm looking for betas who would tell me honestly if they like it, and if they don't, tell me what they feel is wrong with the story. You can be a line-by-line beta if you like, but I'd prefer just a general sense of what's good/wrong with the chapters.

Thanks. If you'd like, I can start off by sending you the first chapter, and if you wish to continue then we can go from there.

Edit: Grammar and spelling are absolutely perfect. Don't worry, I'm very meticulous about that.

GeekTells · 11-20-2012, 02:13 PM

Contact me via PM.

strandedhero · 11-20-2012, 05:08 PM

If you're willing to swap, my novel needs a beta and it's about the same length. I posted about it here: http://www.absolutewrite.com/forums/...d.php?t=258621
PM me if you want!

GinnieHazel · 12-01-2012, 01:59 AM

Could I read the first chapter?

11-20-2012, 01:54 PM	#1
dogpie figuring it all out Join Date: Mar 2012 Posts: 56	Beta Needed for 28k Coming of Age Novella This is my first time asking for a beta (who isn't someone I know), so here it goes. My story is a 28k coming of age contemporary novella about a lonely 19 year old guy who never seems to have things go his way. He has a knack for using the internet too much, and seeing the internet as if it were the real world around him. But when he meets the love of his life online, he loses touch of the real world. That, and the secret he hides from himself. This is a very introspective story, and there are crude words, but not very many. I'm looking for betas who would tell me honestly if they like it, and if they don't, tell me what they feel is wrong with the story. You can be a line-by-line beta if you like, but I'd prefer just a general sense of what's good/wrong with the chapters. Thanks. If you'd like, I can start off by sending you the first chapter, and if you wish to continue then we can go from there. Edit: Grammar and spelling are absolutely perfect. Don't worry, I'm very meticulous about that.

11-20-2012, 02:13 PM	#2
GeekTells Tick tock... Join Date: Sep 2012 Posts: 155	Contact me via PM. __________________ Tech journalist, aspiring fiction author, musician, geek, poker enthusiast...GeekTells.

11-20-2012, 05:08 PM	#3
strandedhero practical experience, FTW Join Date: Nov 2011 Location: Canada Posts: 191	If you're willing to swap, my novel needs a beta and it's about the same length. I posted about it here: http://www.absolutewrite.com/forums/...d.php?t=258621 PM me if you want! __________________ Querying a YA Contemp in verse. I've probably refreshed my email eight times while you were reading this sentence.

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12-01-2012, 01:59 AM	#4
GinnieHazel figuring it all out Join Date: Nov 2012 Location: Stoke-on-Trent Posts: 91	Could I read the first chapter?