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The purpose of the dialogue tag is to identify the speaker, and if identification is needed then the sooner that is done the better. Burying a speaker identification tag in the middle of a paragraph thinking it makes the tag 'even more invisible' is both self-deception and wrong.
I agree with your response to that except for the bolded part, in some situations. I like using tags to very occasionally alter sentence rhythm if there's a solid reason to do so and I can get away with it in terms of clarity. I wouldn't do it to make the tag more invisible but I would do it to affect cadence.
It's just like any other rule: useful, but not absolute. If it's not clear who's speaking, it's a good idea to get the dialogue tag in at the first natural break*. A dialogue tag shouldn't create repetition, unless that repetition is useful (which, with tags, it rarely is).
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*It just occurred to me while typing that that we wouldn't put a tag solely to clarify speaker early in a line of dialogue if it broke the rhythm of the sentence. We might break the sentence, but only at the end of a phrase where there's a natural pause.
"Go get some milk from the store. The one down the road," said Annie.
"Go get some milk from the store," said Annie. "The one down the road."
Both of those are fine but they sound different.
"Go get some milk," said Annie, "from the store. The one down the road." I'd have issues with breaking the phrase in that spot, though, unless I wanted to really fragment what is already a pretty curt, fragmented line.