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practical experience, FTW
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Yellow Fever?
So, I need to kill off a fairly major character in the next twenty pages (I plan to have her die on page 50). This character's death was only backstory in the second draft, but I decided to show her demise in this third draft.
Problem is, in draft 2, she died of a "tropical fever." In this draft, her cause of death needs to be specific. She dies in summer 1799 in Barbados. I thought of yellow fever. It fits all my requirements. But it seems like yellow fever always occurred in a wider outbreak and I don't think Barbados had a yellow fever problem at the time. Plus, I don't want to kill a lot of characters who would be exposed to the disease, just her. Doesn't have to be a tropical disease necessarily, just something prevalent but untreatable and quick. Any suggestions?
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never mind the shorty
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Well, you could always create a few random non-named people and say they died of the disease, too. Then it makes sense.
Or you could say that she was in a remote place/was quarantined/people took precautions, and so the disease didn't spread. Or you could just say it was a miracle that the disease that killed her didn't spread. Or you could kill her in another way--an accident or fire. All that being said: how about malaria? Deadly but not contagious. It's definitely tropical, too.
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Historicals and Horror rule
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A venomous bite or any insect or any animal bite that becomes infected.
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Tropical malaria.
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practical experience, FTW
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Thanks for the replies. Malaria seems popular; will have to research a little more.
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figuring it all out
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I'd go with malaria.
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You're right that yellow fever does tend to occur in outbreaks, but there are always at least a few cases in areas where it is found. Malaria is more common, with more cases around the world (it's the number 1 killer of children under 5 in Africa). Both malaria and yellow fever are spread by mosquitoes, but different kinds. But enough of the epidemiology lesson, especially since you went with malaria.
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Back then it wasn't uncommon to die of some non-specific "fever." I guess if your story absolutely demands a scientifically accurate diagnosis, you may need to pick something. Malaria can be fatal, and it can weaken a person so they succumb to some other infection. But it is not necessarily fatal, in fact many victims can live a long time with it. I've heard the Blackwater Fever type of malaria is pretty lethal, though I'm not sure when the term came into use.
I have to agree that Yellow Fever is overkill. I grew up in Jacksonville, Florida which was still a bit traumatised by an outbreak in the 1890s. Read Bring Out Your Dead about the 1793 outbreak in Philadelphia if you want grim details. Funny thing is I think the doctors killed damn near as many folks as the fever. If you really want to do in your sufferer, just give her a double dose of jalap suspended in calomel.
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I wouldn't say the story requires an exact, scientific diagnosis nor does it have to be something doctors recognized. The accuracy is more for me. I didn't want to just heap a bunch of symptoms on her.
Besides, no matter what it is, she's dying. And I'm sure the local physician will bleed her and do her more harm than good. I'm rethinking my decision about making it malaria. They had a treatment for it already by my time period, quinine.
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How about tetanus? Can happen to anyone and isn't a contagious disease. Could also be something like tuberculosis, which is contagious but it is possible for it to take one member of a family, for example, and effect no one else. My grandfather lost a sister to that back in the 1890’s, and no one else caught it. He referred to it as consumption, but I don’t know what it would have been in the 1700’s
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Many, many people died of tropical malaria, some very quickly, despite the existence of quinine. It's still a disease that kills a lot of people every year. |
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