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Beta needed: YA Contemp Thriller

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Hi guys. I've done one round of betas already, but I've changed some major plot points in this ms and would love to get some more feedback.

Genre: YA Contemp Thriller
Length: around 57k

Basic Premise: Robbie's a petty thief from South London, caught shoplifting for the third time. The police offer him deal: go undercover in one of London's most elite private schools, catch whoever's killing rich teens, and they'll let him off doing time. Turns out posh kids are signing up for a life-or-death game known as The Hunt. The Hunger Games meets Spooks (MI:5).

I posted the opening on SYW a loooong time ago. It has changed ever so slightly, but it should give you a feel for the writing and whether you'd enjoy it.

What I'm looking for: general feedback on plot, pacing and character. Line by line isn't necessary, but if you happen to catch any mistakes, by all means let me know!

Slight caveat: This book is set in London and uses British English, including some idioms and slang. I have tried to keep these to just a few choice phrases, but in the past there have been issues with readers of other nationalities not understanding. If this would be a big stumbling block for you, this might not be the book for you.

Can I swap? Fairly busy at the moment, but depending on the project and timeframe, I may be able to help you with your YA project.
 
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