Peotry With Opposites

catian · Feb 9, 2012

This makes a change from rhyming with sounds.
let's use opposite words instead like this
New lines, every two lines like this:

1st line:the noise was loud it came from out
2nd line: but not as loud as the growl that grew within.

3rd line: In the shade-freckled path's chill
4th line: your smile lights my journey's heat.

Then the 5th person would create a new line.

kborsden · Feb 9, 2012

catian said:
rhyme each last word with its opposite.

The opposite to 'out' is 'in' - these do not rhyme. Do you mean that instead of rhyming, we write a line which uses the opposite to the last word of the previous line?

catian · Feb 9, 2012

kborsden said:
The opposite to 'out' is 'in' - these do not rhyme. Do you mean that instead of rhyming, we write a line which uses the opposite to the last word of the previous line?

Hi kborsden, sorry yes that is what I mean.
not rhyming is such but using opposites.

kborsden · Feb 9, 2012

catian said:
the noise was loud it came from out

but not as loud as the growl that grew within.

catian · Feb 9, 2012

the fun began to swing without

Ambrosia · Feb 9, 2012

I see a problem with the exercise, Catian. If the last word never changes, it will just be a repetition between out and in, which will run out quickly. Perhaps you could have the third person (fifth person, seventh person, etc.) think of a new line with a different word to provide an opposite word for. For instance,

1st line:the noise was loud it came from out
2nd line: but not as loud as the growl that grew within.

3rd line: In the shade-freckled path's chill
4th line: your smile lights my journey's heat.

Then the 5th person would create a new line. What do you think?

You should also edit your original post by choosing "go advanced once you click edit, and edit your title by taking out the "rhyming with". If you just leave "opposites" it tells people what the thread is about. Otherwise they will be confused.

catian · Feb 9, 2012

kborsden said:
The opposite to 'out' is 'in' - these do not rhyme. Do you mean that instead of rhyming, we write a line which uses the opposite to the last word of the previous line?

Ambrosia said:
I see a problem with the exercise, Catian. If the last word never changes, it will just be a repetition between out and in, which will run out quickly. Perhaps you could have the third person (fifth person, seventh person, etc.) think of a new line with a different word to provide an opposite word for. For instance,

1st line:the noise was loud it came from out
2nd line: but not as loud as the growl that grew within.

3rd line: In the shade-freckled path's chill
4th line: your smile lights my journey's heat.

Then the 5th person would create a new line. What do you think?

You should also edit your original post by choosing "go advanced once you click edit, and edit your title by taking out the "rhyming with". If you just leave "opposites" it tells people what the thread is about. Otherwise they will be confused.

Hello Ambrosia that sounds perfect lets do it this way, it makes more sense

kborsden · Feb 9, 2012

We could also do couplets: first verse is the opposite, second verse is a new word for the next post to be opposite to.

catian · Feb 9, 2012

kborsden said:
We could also do couplets: first verse is the opposite, second verse is a new word for the next post to be opposite to.

that sounds great let's do that too.

catian · Feb 9, 2012

the word fell silent almost light

kborsden · Feb 9, 2012

Red = your word; purple = opposite; green = new word

catian said:
the word fell silence almost light

every shard recovered from the darkness
is a new born splinter of hope

catian · Feb 9, 2012

the skies looked down to find despair
and gave it smiles of outer grace

kborsden · Feb 10, 2012

Pressed against a man's eye, she is disgraced,
but even so, she has delicate pace.

catian · Feb 10, 2012

the wind whistled in waves so quick
it liftted leaves up down, sublime

Ambrosia · Feb 10, 2012

you devil, it's my turn to debase
and point to your blatant crime

jaus tail · Aug 11, 2014

I am foreign to this land
hear my story before throwing me to the sea

a thorn hurts no more than a lover's lies

kborsden · Aug 12, 2014

Jaus, I don't think you caught the intention of this game.

Your word was: lies

We drink to the moment of truth,
Even when only ten percent proof

My opposite was: truth ; the rhyme was: proof

Your next rhyming couplet should have verse1 end with an opposite of: proof

jaus tail · Aug 12, 2014

I didn't get it.

Ambrosia's poem was

you devil, it's my turn to debase
and point to your blatant crime

And I wrote,

I am foreign to this land
hear my story before throwing me to the sea

The opposite of crime is...?

I'll try...opposite of proof could be hypothesis.

the math teacher coughed out a hypothesis
but unfortunately I was sleeping

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