laying on a shelve I fight off a spider

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laying on a shelve I fight off a spider
but, not looking down
possible we are dead or in a diorama
people being shrunk to the size of insects
plastic bushes over scale
the building flimsy
the roads all wrong
there is tape all along the edges and glue in the seams
now the faces are gone and there are match sticks for legs

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This feels unfinished somehow, just like it needs thinking over, through a few days or weeks in the back of your mind.

But overall, I love this little piece. It's a fantastic picture, the words pasted in the same as the subject. Never mind technical quibbles; this is a poem one could happily carry around for a long time.