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"The gathering hall was filled with voices as the last of the Clan of the Bright settled themselves. Aletta surveyed the crowd from her seat at the elder's table. She waited for the babble of voices to fall away before beginning the meeting."
Does "the last of the Clan of the Bright" mean that these are the sole remaining members of said clan? Or does it merely refer to the last ones of that clan to seat themselves? That ambiguity caused me to pause and ponder, which is not a good thing.
Crowd scenes are a challenge to write at the best of times and starting with one can be tricky. Meetings are inherently boring as well, so I would say that this one had best be about something so intriguing it will beg me to turn the page. And that means the very next line had best be a grabber.