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I'm in the process of re-reading and processing a critique I got a few weeks ago. The critique was of the synopsis of my first novel. Most of it is pretty valid, some of it I think is a little unfair and a few parts just seem weird. This criticism in particular struck me as odd, but maybe she's right and I'm the one who has strange ideas.
Early on in the story I have two female characters (both in their early 20s) go swimming at the river. My critiquer seemed to find the idea of two girls swimming at the river to be borderline ridiculous, because in her mind 20-something year old girls would much rather be at a public pool where there are "cute waiters." Now I don't know what kind of public pools she has in her area, but I've never seen a cute waiter or any other kind of waiter at our public pool (maybe she meant lifeguards?) Our public pools are full of haggard looking not-in-the-best-shape parents and a lot of noisy kids, which is exactly the opposite of what I wanted in a swimming experience as a 20-something. When I was that age, we all swam at the river.
In this particular scene, the two girls are attacked at the swimming hole, which isn't something that would happen at a public pool. So if my critiquer is right and the swimming hole setting is absurd, I have to do some fairly significant rethinking and rewriting of that scene and its aftermath.
It just struck me as kind of an odd criticism, but maybe growing up near the river gave me different ideas about summer recreation. Would love to know if anyone else agrees or disagrees. Thanks!
Early on in the story I have two female characters (both in their early 20s) go swimming at the river. My critiquer seemed to find the idea of two girls swimming at the river to be borderline ridiculous, because in her mind 20-something year old girls would much rather be at a public pool where there are "cute waiters." Now I don't know what kind of public pools she has in her area, but I've never seen a cute waiter or any other kind of waiter at our public pool (maybe she meant lifeguards?) Our public pools are full of haggard looking not-in-the-best-shape parents and a lot of noisy kids, which is exactly the opposite of what I wanted in a swimming experience as a 20-something. When I was that age, we all swam at the river.
In this particular scene, the two girls are attacked at the swimming hole, which isn't something that would happen at a public pool. So if my critiquer is right and the swimming hole setting is absurd, I have to do some fairly significant rethinking and rewriting of that scene and its aftermath.
It just struck me as kind of an odd criticism, but maybe growing up near the river gave me different ideas about summer recreation. Would love to know if anyone else agrees or disagrees. Thanks!