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I have a big problem, and I'm going to use Harry Potter to illustrate it (I don't have a Harry Potter obsession, okay! It's just the only story where other people actually seem to know what I'm talking about when I bring it up xD).
Alright.
Every story has a main issue, which I guess is the central problem. Conflict? Central conflict. Let's go with that xD It's the story's 'spine', I guess, and there are subplots weaving into and out of it. I try to stick as close to this as possible when I'm writing, but I tend to have good ideas for scenes that start way before this particular conflict begins, or stray away while the story's moving (or maybe stretch out other, plot-necessary scenes).
So here's where Harry Potter comes in. A lot of the story could be cut. If we say that Hagrid's arrival is the inciting incident -- because this is what changes Harry's life and sets the story on its way -- you could also say that this is where the story really begins.
"Oh, but you need to show Harry's life before this happens so we can really sympathise with him." That's still doable.
Let's say we keep the "prologue" of a first chapter. The chapter after could start in the sea-hut, with Harry remembering the mysterious letters that filled up the Dursleys' house and how they're like all of the other weird things that have happened (which totally weren't his fault) but more important, and then when you start to feel sorry for him Hagrid could burst through the door and tell him the truth. That would save maybe twenty pages, and there's enough time to show how crappy Harry's life is and how he's treated, and how it's a sucky birthday. You don't need much to paint the picture.
Likewise, a lot of the trip to Diagon Alley could be cut, all that shopping that was unecessarily dramatized, and the gap between the inciting incident and the introduction of the central conflict could be cut down. Yes, the conflict's coming is hinted at, but it isn't really clear what the problem is at that point and there is very little genuine tension or conflict (most of it is just "interesting stuff").
This is why I'm not sure what to do. The really efficient, industry-oriented, writerly part of my brain tries to keep things as tight as possible, but the reader side of my brain believes that "stories" are big and nebulous and there is far more room for dramatizing things that don't really need to be dramatized and "interesting stuff, because it's interesting to you and your readers" than most advice suggests.
So am I right or am I crazy?
Alright.
Every story has a main issue, which I guess is the central problem. Conflict? Central conflict. Let's go with that xD It's the story's 'spine', I guess, and there are subplots weaving into and out of it. I try to stick as close to this as possible when I'm writing, but I tend to have good ideas for scenes that start way before this particular conflict begins, or stray away while the story's moving (or maybe stretch out other, plot-necessary scenes).
So here's where Harry Potter comes in. A lot of the story could be cut. If we say that Hagrid's arrival is the inciting incident -- because this is what changes Harry's life and sets the story on its way -- you could also say that this is where the story really begins.
"Oh, but you need to show Harry's life before this happens so we can really sympathise with him." That's still doable.
Let's say we keep the "prologue" of a first chapter. The chapter after could start in the sea-hut, with Harry remembering the mysterious letters that filled up the Dursleys' house and how they're like all of the other weird things that have happened (which totally weren't his fault) but more important, and then when you start to feel sorry for him Hagrid could burst through the door and tell him the truth. That would save maybe twenty pages, and there's enough time to show how crappy Harry's life is and how he's treated, and how it's a sucky birthday. You don't need much to paint the picture.
Likewise, a lot of the trip to Diagon Alley could be cut, all that shopping that was unecessarily dramatized, and the gap between the inciting incident and the introduction of the central conflict could be cut down. Yes, the conflict's coming is hinted at, but it isn't really clear what the problem is at that point and there is very little genuine tension or conflict (most of it is just "interesting stuff").
This is why I'm not sure what to do. The really efficient, industry-oriented, writerly part of my brain tries to keep things as tight as possible, but the reader side of my brain believes that "stories" are big and nebulous and there is far more room for dramatizing things that don't really need to be dramatized and "interesting stuff, because it's interesting to you and your readers" than most advice suggests.
So am I right or am I crazy?