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Seeking clarity for my fantasy short story:
Sennah’s eyes opened and she knew her humble room, her bed — and the thick-knuckled hand stretching up toward her. Her gaze ran from his arm to the shoulder she’d snuggled against and saw the first splatters of blood. Then torn skin beyond, pale and freckle-dusted.
What physical arrangement for the two of them do you get from this?
I could not make sense of it. If the hand is stretching up toward her, how can she be lying next to him? Or is that where she used to be but now she's in some other position? Either way, I can't visualize this.
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