I've started working on my next book, and I'm not feeling all too confident about the pacing of my first couple chapters.
Super brief summary of the beginning this sci-fi/fantasy erotica: A soldier defending his country's border wakes up after an enemy attack that nearly killed him. He learns that a mercenary group saved him, but his wife and child (and the rest of their village a number of miles away) were killed. Then the rest of the plot really kicks off, where he starts hunting down those responsible for the attack, enters into a rather dysfunctional relationship with his trainer, and starts going more than a little crazy.
The way I have it set up is that the first two chapters establish his cozy life with his loving family while he's home on leave. I wanted to "show, not tell" their importance, both to build an emotional connection and to provide a contrast to the darker tone of the rest of the book. With my current outline, Chapter 3 is when he gets called back to the base, and Chapter 4 is when he wakes up and finds out what happened.
Obviously, I'm still in the beginning stages and there will be MUCH editing later on. However, I can't help but feel that the first couple chapters just feel like a giant prologue, and I don't know if I'm spending too much time there. I also don't want to spend too much time on the family when I'm going to be killing them off pretty quickly anyway.
Character deaths. How do they work?
Super brief summary of the beginning this sci-fi/fantasy erotica: A soldier defending his country's border wakes up after an enemy attack that nearly killed him. He learns that a mercenary group saved him, but his wife and child (and the rest of their village a number of miles away) were killed. Then the rest of the plot really kicks off, where he starts hunting down those responsible for the attack, enters into a rather dysfunctional relationship with his trainer, and starts going more than a little crazy.
The way I have it set up is that the first two chapters establish his cozy life with his loving family while he's home on leave. I wanted to "show, not tell" their importance, both to build an emotional connection and to provide a contrast to the darker tone of the rest of the book. With my current outline, Chapter 3 is when he gets called back to the base, and Chapter 4 is when he wakes up and finds out what happened.
Obviously, I'm still in the beginning stages and there will be MUCH editing later on. However, I can't help but feel that the first couple chapters just feel like a giant prologue, and I don't know if I'm spending too much time there. I also don't want to spend too much time on the family when I'm going to be killing them off pretty quickly anyway.
Character deaths. How do they work?