Yeah, it's very distant and reads like a script. It reads like you're telling yourself what the picture is supposed to look like and the overall feel instead of writing to connect to a reader.
I'm going to start making stuff up here to show you what all that means to me, and apologies now for changing to past tense, I really can't do present):
"Dammit!" Melanie threw her paintbrush across the room. Blue paint flung back in her face and coated her hair, making it stick to her scalp. The fire-engine red Punky Color dye job she spent all day in her sister's salon for would be ruined trying to get that damn blue Japan color out.
Now, you may not like my writing and I certainly took liberties, but I'm writing for example, not a Hugo.
But now we have a reason to talk about her hair color. We also have an emotional connection to the issue at hand. Her irritation is shown, there's a sensory response (the paint being flung on her face and hair) and response to that. If you wanted to get into the painting problems, get in her head:
Three hours and she still couldn't get the lines right. <--"Dammit" and throwing the paint brush already shows us she's frustrated so you don't have to say it again. But now we know why she's frustrated.
Anyway, that's what I mean by get into it and show. We need to get to know you're MC, not read about your MC.
But the next question to ask yourself is: is this situation a compelling start? What makes this scene interesting? We get frustrated all the time. Why is *this* instance of frustration going to be intriguing? And that's where you should start - with what makes *this* problem different from everyone else's everyday. Is being frustrated because she's not getting her painting right a compelling frustration?
HTH