Okay - so this is only one beta reader's opinion, ( But a good beta reader) But I thought I would fly it by you guys. This is a paranormal (supernatural?) thriller. One character has been kept a prisoner all his life. He has abilities that his captors use and barter his cooperation by threatening the life of his brother (who thinks he is dead).
Anyway- his handler is about ten years older than he is. She is the only one he has had contact with for the last 15 years (he has Stockholm syndrome) When he was sixteen she started to have sex with him as yet another way to manipulate him.
My beta didn't like this. Does it give you major ich factors? it is pretty important to the plot as he needs to chose between her and his brother later on.
Anyway- his handler is about ten years older than he is. She is the only one he has had contact with for the last 15 years (he has Stockholm syndrome) When he was sixteen she started to have sex with him as yet another way to manipulate him.
My beta didn't like this. Does it give you major ich factors? it is pretty important to the plot as he needs to chose between her and his brother later on.