I would be grateful for advice from POV experts here. In my soft sci-fi ms, I start out with an omniscient narrator, which I hope is obvious from the first paragraph.
Omni then takes a back seat to limited third, with generally only one character's POV per scene. The MC sometimes relays nightmarish flashbacks in first person. Then, like a typical back seat driver, the omni narrator will pipe up with omni comments, like in this snippet where Lyndon isn't the POV character:
I tried writing the entire thing in limited third, but found this way worked better. I was able to significantly cut the original word count, letting unobtrusive omni guy relay vital info in the most efficient way possible.
Of all my beta readers, only one was confused by the POV shifts. It may be a matter of personal preference, their not liking that kind of viewpoint, but POV shifts from chapter to chapter, or even scene to scene, aren't unusual.
Could I be asking for problems with this POV choice? Agents have seen everything, and I'm wondering if what I'm trying to pull off is something they're likely to recognize as acceptable.
Omni then takes a back seat to limited third, with generally only one character's POV per scene. The MC sometimes relays nightmarish flashbacks in first person. Then, like a typical back seat driver, the omni narrator will pipe up with omni comments, like in this snippet where Lyndon isn't the POV character:
I've read that this technique is referred to as a quiet omni narrator. (Writing the (Quiet) Omniscient Narrator) http://www.glimmertrain.com/b85ng.html"Some boys stash porn in their rooms. I hid literature written in ancient Greek, hoping you would never find it and start putting two and two together."
"I stash porn," Lyndon said to lighten the mood, but the others weren't listening.
I tried writing the entire thing in limited third, but found this way worked better. I was able to significantly cut the original word count, letting unobtrusive omni guy relay vital info in the most efficient way possible.
Of all my beta readers, only one was confused by the POV shifts. It may be a matter of personal preference, their not liking that kind of viewpoint, but POV shifts from chapter to chapter, or even scene to scene, aren't unusual.
Could I be asking for problems with this POV choice? Agents have seen everything, and I'm wondering if what I'm trying to pull off is something they're likely to recognize as acceptable.