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OK, I'll change the wording a bit. As for the "snap" open, I always saw it as indicating someone woke with a start - which is a line I could use instead now that I think of it.
Er, well...that's not exactly fresh, either.
Look. Your character is a vampire. What is the first interesting thing that a vampire does after waking up? Not the ordinary stuff we all do, but the weird, other-worldly vampirish stuff. Something that instantly tells the reader she's not in Kansas any more.
That would be a better place to start.