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Screeched could be said to be overkill, and distracting insofar as it makes one wonder 'how' he screeched. Better to let the exclamation marks do the work and leave the rest to the reader's imagination.
"They're coming for us! They're going to kill us all!" he said.
Yeah, very convincing. I think I'll go for "screeched", thanks.
Screeched is a volume so it works. However, unless his guy has already been portrayed as one with an unusually high voice, "screech" doesn't fit. Holler, yelled, or shouted would be better. I wouldn't put the dialogue tag at the end either.
"They're coming for us," he shouted. "They're going to kill us all."
Exclamation points are overused, too, by the way