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Fun thread. Made me take a 2nd look at my opening and move this (3 sentence) paragraph from 5th to 1st.
THE DAY DENA told her parents she and Jack were quitting their jobs in Portland, he at The Oregonian—he’d grown to hate the smell of ink, a smell like boiled liver—and she at Multnomah County Library, her mother cried. She took Dena aside and said, “I always knew he’d ruin your life.” Which sounded bad because her mother really loved Jack, and was entirely untrue—no one was ruining anyone’s life.
THE DAY DENA told her parents she and Jack were quitting their jobs in Portland, he at The Oregonian—he’d grown to hate the smell of ink, a smell like boiled liver—and she at Multnomah County Library, her mother cried. She took Dena aside and said, “I always knew he’d ruin your life.” Which sounded bad because her mother really loved Jack, and was entirely untrue—no one was ruining anyone’s life.
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