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Sorted, I think. Sunk is more of a UK term I guess. But it wasn't meant to be taken literally. Just an example to try and show what I meant. Anyhow:
The manor, situated on a hill and backing onto the sea (subsitute 'backing onto the sea' with 'the sea behind it' if necessary), loomed ahead of Robert. Abandoned for over a century, it stood like a relic. And viewed from the village, he only just realised he owned it all.
Something like that anyway. I'll try to refine it a bit more, but I don't think that should leave anything unclear anymore anyway.
And I'll still try to find a subsitute for loomed.
The manor, situated on a hill and backing onto the sea (subsitute 'backing onto the sea' with 'the sea behind it' if necessary), loomed ahead of Robert. Abandoned for over a century, it stood like a relic. And viewed from the village, he only just realised he owned it all.
Something like that anyway. I'll try to refine it a bit more, but I don't think that should leave anything unclear anymore anyway.
And I'll still try to find a subsitute for loomed.
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