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englyn madness!!
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Dither and quake ye gods of
Myth and speak no more to Love
For she alone bears truth-from the sum in
Her everlasting trove.
Myth and speak no more to Love
For she alone bears truth-from the sum in
Her everlasting trove.
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Huh?
Are you implying I'm slow, or that my "Tarnished" poem doesn't rhyme?
Or both?
The poem doesn't rhyme apart from L1 and L4
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I step over ruins and bones
of the dejected dethroned;
what a shame to die alone, homeless
as miserable toads.
of the dejected dethroned;
what a shame to die alone, homeless
as miserable toads.
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sweetness that could curl your toes
cruelty wrinkled my nose
old money and power hence, made cents less
waited for him to close
cruelty wrinkled my nose
old money and power hence, made cents less
waited for him to close
I was trying to see how you incorporated the previous poem into your writing. But didn't quite see the finesse
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how do you mean?
is my englyn shit??
your writing is never never shit. I just wasn't sure how to add the word from the previous poem.
you are a wonderful writer.
always
G.
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Kie,
They are phonetic rhymes. Each ending word has the "er" sound:
er
wor
chur
mir
And of course ang"er" is the 7th and "chur"lish is the 9th syllables.
Again I think it's my American vs. your Welsh pronunciations perhaps. I could be completely wrong about accepted rhymes though, I don't know all the rules yet. But unless I am wrong, it rhymes just fine and fits the form.
As I am trying hard to learn this, please correct any errors friend. Thank you.
They are phonetic rhymes. Each ending word has the "er" sound:
er
wor
chur
mir
And of course ang"er" is the 7th and "chur"lish is the 9th syllables.
Again I think it's my American vs. your Welsh pronunciations perhaps. I could be completely wrong about accepted rhymes though, I don't know all the rules yet. But unless I am wrong, it rhymes just fine and fits the form.
As I am trying hard to learn this, please correct any errors friend. Thank you.
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Old Money glared at the kid.
"Young man! Please control your Id."
Ancient Blow-hard, forcing his bid on any
Thing the boy ever did.
"Young man! Please control your Id."
Ancient Blow-hard, forcing his bid on any
Thing the boy ever did.
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Dethroned, he left dejected
Seeking new home. Connected
with silence, ambulated Editor,
Once great - moaned - reflected
Seeking new home. Connected
with silence, ambulated Editor,
Once great - moaned - reflected
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Mythical legend or lore
hidden trove blackened mark bore
upon cypress within moor, outpoured ghosts,
nymphs, sprites with glorious gore.
hidden trove blackened mark bore
upon cypress within moor, outpoured ghosts,
nymphs, sprites with glorious gore.
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I want to try......here goes:
mesmerized, carefully watched,
this new form I hate to botch;
eager to learn, it ain't much, a touch; try
by trial, this form I'll catch
Help me out, K. Any better, PNHT?
mesmerized, carefully watched,
this new form I hate to botch;
eager to learn, it ain't much, a touch; try
by trial, this form I'll catch
Help me out, K. Any better, PNHT?
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Needs a rhyme in the third line: the seventh syllable must rhyme with either the eighth or the ninth.
If I'm reading the book right, that is -- Kieran?
If I'm reading the book right, that is -- Kieran?
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do not look to the sun for
enlightenment lest your
dazzlement leave you darkened; stop, and see
the shadows on the floor
enlightenment lest your
dazzlement leave you darkened; stop, and see
the shadows on the floor
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wow, nice to see some return of interest...yay!! nice first try kdnxdr, and you onestepp -- it gets easier, promise. O, rob, your memory serves you well from last time this thread did its magic.
the floor has now fallen short,
the hall door a distant port -
with dimly lit but calling thoughts fraught, stood
waiting in iron wrought.
the floor has now fallen short,
the hall door a distant port -
with dimly lit but calling thoughts fraught, stood
waiting in iron wrought.
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As the dawn begins its walk
the daylight fades as the chalk
that scribes the fossilized talking clock's tone,
lost as absent dry caulk
the daylight fades as the chalk
that scribes the fossilized talking clock's tone,
lost as absent dry caulk
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I left that world far behind
the door ajar - staring blind
at swirling starlets whilst minding kindness
in hope for what I find
the door ajar - staring blind
at swirling starlets whilst minding kindness
in hope for what I find
Here goes...
Cowering eyes to the ground
praise to the cross on the mound,
each terrorised cry expounding their love.
Their god, making no sound.
Cowering eyes to the ground
praise to the cross on the mound,
each terrorised cry expounding their love.
Their god, making no sound.
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Well done for a virgin Englynist -- but L3 needs another 'ound' rhyme. The third line has 10s and the 7th rhymes with either the 8th or 9th
Forgive me my error, here is an offerng to appease the spirits:
Tedium cuts out the heart
same bland tastes, ashen and tart
unable to find my part, my art stops
broken before it starts
Tedium cuts out the heart
same bland tastes, ashen and tart
unable to find my part, my art stops
broken before it starts