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Topic title is purely jest, but I do feel as though I am struggling with tense in my story. I have a hard time proofreading my own work because I have a tendency to auto-correct in my head, but fail to actually correct in the document. Oddly, this does not extend to academic papers.
Here are a couple of sample paragraphs from the fiction story I am writing:
[FONT="]On the eastern horizon stood his partially collapsed residence, with a heavily damaged watermill still creaking wearily in an attempt to operate. A horrible thought formed in his mind, that his family had tried to find him there and ran into inescapable trouble. Noel forcefully shook his head of the thought.
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[FONT="]His residence sat on a hill that overlooked the town and required what looked to be a difficult trek through the true residential area of Veiled Vale. The downed buildings were not the only remains impeding their progress, [/FONT][FONT="]heaven forbid that he or the boy be traumatized any further.[/FONT]
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And here is some sample dialogue:
[FONT="]Hero gave a slight nod of her head, “I didn’t want to upset you by saying I only found one last night. It’s likely that most people fled into the forest.”[/FONT]
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[FONT="]“It’s just you now, but we’ll take care of you,” Noel said, making an effort to meet the boy at eye level. “I’ll do what I can to find your family.” The boy lit up a little, it was faint and distant.[/FONT]
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[FONT="]Hero looked pointedly a Noel and shook her head. “I make no promises as to your care or your parents. If Noel can manage it, there’s a nearby city, or maybe it’s a ruin now, to the north."[/FONT]
For the record, stylistically speaking, I like to leave grammar errors in the sentences the character speaks. To me, it sounds more natural.
Here are a couple of sample paragraphs from the fiction story I am writing:
[FONT="]On the eastern horizon stood his partially collapsed residence, with a heavily damaged watermill still creaking wearily in an attempt to operate. A horrible thought formed in his mind, that his family had tried to find him there and ran into inescapable trouble. Noel forcefully shook his head of the thought.
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[FONT="]His residence sat on a hill that overlooked the town and required what looked to be a difficult trek through the true residential area of Veiled Vale. The downed buildings were not the only remains impeding their progress, [/FONT][FONT="]heaven forbid that he or the boy be traumatized any further.[/FONT]
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And here is some sample dialogue:
[FONT="]Hero gave a slight nod of her head, “I didn’t want to upset you by saying I only found one last night. It’s likely that most people fled into the forest.”[/FONT]
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[FONT="]“It’s just you now, but we’ll take care of you,” Noel said, making an effort to meet the boy at eye level. “I’ll do what I can to find your family.” The boy lit up a little, it was faint and distant.[/FONT]
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[FONT="]Hero looked pointedly a Noel and shook her head. “I make no promises as to your care or your parents. If Noel can manage it, there’s a nearby city, or maybe it’s a ruin now, to the north."[/FONT]
For the record, stylistically speaking, I like to leave grammar errors in the sentences the character speaks. To me, it sounds more natural.