If you are reading a very descriptive story, do you skip over the long sentence?
I vary length, however, length is required in this particular piece. I am trying to slow down the reader but I don't want to lose them altogether.
Here is an example of what I mean.
Pakak's wings tilted forward, the wind blocked against his outstretched feathers stopped his motion, his frame dropping slowly floating on unseen pockets of air, landing him on a ledge protruding from the edge of the rocky slope. Ulu and I followed, our white wings gently turning in unison, the breeze trapped between our bodies lowered us to the outcropping, as easy as a cascading snowflake, and we settled all clumped together for a restful nights sleep.
I vary length, however, length is required in this particular piece. I am trying to slow down the reader but I don't want to lose them altogether.
Here is an example of what I mean.
Pakak's wings tilted forward, the wind blocked against his outstretched feathers stopped his motion, his frame dropping slowly floating on unseen pockets of air, landing him on a ledge protruding from the edge of the rocky slope. Ulu and I followed, our white wings gently turning in unison, the breeze trapped between our bodies lowered us to the outcropping, as easy as a cascading snowflake, and we settled all clumped together for a restful nights sleep.