what about using sentence rhythm as a means of setting a pace for the reader?
taking into consideration that the writer knows the length of a chapter and the way the narrative is structured, why is there anything 'irregular' about customizing the sentence via rhythmic pauses if the style better fits the flow?
plus, sentence-break forces the pause. if a writer wrote according to some rhythm, why not use the effect, especially when the comma is such a small thing;
to break the sentence forces the pause.
but perhaps this all comes to preference and perspective and how the modern novel is to be experienced.
jb
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Good writers do use this technique, but seldom, if ever, by breaking a sentence. I find doing so poor writing, at best. Rather than breaking a sentence, you stop the sentence, start a new paragraph, and use a very short sentence to open it. A paragraph break is much larger than a comma, and a very short sentence following a long one, with a paragraph break between, does the job perfectly.
To me, breaking sentences is artificial, gimmicky, and interferes with reading, especially when there is no need for it.
Of course, I have no clue about the length a chapter will be. Nor does it matter. I think all good writer are masters of rhythm and flow, and both are internal. Good writers do not need sentence breaks in odd places to make every sentence flow as it should.
Even in poetry, there's a heck of a lot more to it than just breaking sentences in a certain place to get rhythm and flow. You might not know this by reading most of the internet poetry out there, but breaking sentence sin real poetery is not as simply as breaking for a pause,or breaking to give rhythm.
It's the internal rhythm and flow and meter that makes poetry works. If you want to use that same internet rhythm, flow, and meter in your fiction, breaking the sentences might work, but if you fail to do this, those broken sentences are just a pain in the butt to read.
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but perhaps this all comes to preference and perspective and how the modern novel is to be experienced.
I don't buy that for a second. If anything, modern readers have completely rejected such writing. Why do you think so few read poetry now?
The thing is, any good writer can force a pause wherever and whenever he wishes to do so. It's not difficult. While it may be a way to look at your own writing as an experiment, though I see no reason to do so, in a published book reading lines like that is something I can't imagine anyone, anywhere, wanting to read for long. It simply is not good writing, is not necessary, and hinders the reader in every way. There are too many much better ways of accomplishing the same thing. Good writers know them, and readers rightfully expect them.
Would you really want to open a published novel and find pages of writing broken up like this?