I am editing a story, and I have a little transition paragraph:
I am not sure of the correct tense of "saw." Should I write "He saw robins" or He had seen robins?" Which is correct or best? My beta readers are not sure.
Thanks for any feedback.
I follow it with somewhat abstract dialogue about birds which I do not wish to include in post.He walks to his back door, opens it, and steps onto his unstained, rotting wooden deck. As he drinks his beer, he listens to the neighborhood traffic, the only sounds on this cool, dark, spring night. He saw robins earlier as the sun set.
I am not sure of the correct tense of "saw." Should I write "He saw robins" or He had seen robins?" Which is correct or best? My beta readers are not sure.
Thanks for any feedback.