Trying to hammer out some revisions, and getting stuck on one bit. It makes sense to me, but the construction is a little odd. Does this make sense if I write it this way? How would you write it differently? I've tried a couple others, but didn't like any of them.
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Veronica Fielding reached the door just ahead of her. She was dressed similarly, but with a Lieutenant’s double leaf on her lapel where Rosa bore only one.
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Veronica Fielding reached the door just ahead of her. She was dressed similarly, but with a Lieutenant’s double leaf on her lapel where Rosa bore only one.
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