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Hi all,
Haven't been around for a while. I went back to my real job, and haven't had time to work on my edit. I changed my opening from a squad room scene where the protagonist finds out about the crime, to an opening in which she is right in the midst of the crime scene. I included the bizarre thoughts I would have in that situation. Opinions on if this is too weird would be appreciated.
It was hot, so the flies were already beginning to collect. Some were dipping in and out of the pool of blood on the very expensive leather of the car seat. A few of them were collecting on the victim’s head, sitting on the edge of the bullet wound. Sarah M, Detective First Grade, wondered briefly if flies drank blood and whose sandwich they would alight on next, before she directed Buzz to the hole in the victim’s head so that he could photograph it. As he snapped away, she stepped back, stretching her long frame back upright.
Also, I need to find info about different types of handguns and which ones eject bullet casings. I googled, but I'm not coming up with this specific info. If you know a good source for this type of info, would you share?
Thanks much,
Nancy
Haven't been around for a while. I went back to my real job, and haven't had time to work on my edit. I changed my opening from a squad room scene where the protagonist finds out about the crime, to an opening in which she is right in the midst of the crime scene. I included the bizarre thoughts I would have in that situation. Opinions on if this is too weird would be appreciated.
It was hot, so the flies were already beginning to collect. Some were dipping in and out of the pool of blood on the very expensive leather of the car seat. A few of them were collecting on the victim’s head, sitting on the edge of the bullet wound. Sarah M, Detective First Grade, wondered briefly if flies drank blood and whose sandwich they would alight on next, before she directed Buzz to the hole in the victim’s head so that he could photograph it. As he snapped away, she stepped back, stretching her long frame back upright.
Also, I need to find info about different types of handguns and which ones eject bullet casings. I googled, but I'm not coming up with this specific info. If you know a good source for this type of info, would you share?
Thanks much,
Nancy