Teens Writing for Teens, the 5th - Page 1088

Thalia · 03-05-2012, 08:46 PM

My BIG BAD is...

...a fifteen-year-old girl.

lisalulu09 · 03-05-2012, 08:47 PM

I'm not sure about my original beginning. I like it, but I don't know if it's hooky enough.

I'm keeping the party. It's the rest of it I'm not sure about.

Thalia · 03-05-2012, 08:49 PM

I need to decide what POV I'm writing in...

I know 3rd person, but whether I'm alternate chapters or just writing omniscient...

I need Sophie's POV, but I need Veronika's for some scenes.

lisalulu09 · 03-05-2012, 08:52 PM

POV is a pain. I kept alternating in close third between Matthew and Carla, but I don't feel... it works.

amlptj · 03-05-2012, 08:52 PM

I feel like blabbering about my BIG BAD but that would ruin the ending of my first book for the 2 people here that are reading it.

You guys really have no idea how excited and proud I am that i figured out this epic ending of my series. Almost every book has some form of a OMG mind screw twist. But this ending gives the whole series and earthshattering OOOOOMMMMMMGGGGG mind screw squared twist!!!!!

Taylor_Writes · 03-05-2012, 08:58 PM

I don't know how old my BIG BAD is... Young, but older than the MC's, making him probably somewhere in his twenties, or maybe he could be eighteen... Or nineteen...

Thalia · 03-05-2012, 08:59 PM

I LOVE that moment.

I'm still working on the synopsis outline for Sherlockettes, but I can't work on it again until late tonight or tomorrow.

lisalulu09 · 03-05-2012, 09:04 PM

Why not, Tally. Hairspray stuff?

I'm keeping this scene. I'm changing the one after it?

I actually don't know the difference between close third and omnicent third that well. I've never written it.

amlptj · 03-05-2012, 09:08 PM

My MC's are 23 in the last two books in the series. Making it a full decade from the beginning to end of the series. With all the challenges they went through they grew up alot, and there abilities transformed and changed making them the people they are when there whole world is ripped and shattered right in front of them. They end up so used to winning against evil forces that be, used to being indestructible that they completely forget what its like to be on the loosing end. To not win in the end.

I'm so evil to my characters!!!!

lisalulu09 · 03-05-2012, 09:19 PM

Mathew and Carla are both eighteen in the first book.

Taylor_Writes · 03-05-2012, 09:24 PM

Jamie and Andrew are eighteen. The six books last from August to July the next year, so they're eighteen throughout the whole series. Jamie dies before his nineteenth birthday.

lisalulu09 · 03-05-2012, 09:26 PM

I'm not sure how long the series is.

Could someone explain the different types of third person POV, and how they work, please?

amlptj · 03-05-2012, 09:28 PM

Awwwwww that's sad!!!!! I killed off one true MC and could literally never do it again. You would think a real person died how utterly depressed I was after I had to kill him off.

Yeah i dont really follow the YA age rules. First book there 13/14 Last two books there 23/24. But the majority of the series (second- seventh) they are YA range

Taylor_Writes · 03-05-2012, 09:30 PM

He's the major character of the two, and I figured that's the best way to end the series. I could keep going on and on and on if I didn't.

lisalulu09 · 03-05-2012, 09:53 PM

Dinner in a minute.

Thalia · 03-05-2012, 10:48 PM

Yeah, Hairspray stuff.

lisalulu09 · 03-05-2012, 10:57 PM

I figured out the POV thing!!

ETA: I just crossed out an ENTIRE SCENE.

amlptj · 03-05-2012, 11:57 PM

Out of class. I feel like i want to bang my head against the wall till it bleeds.

So what's new with everyone else?

lisalulu09 · 03-05-2012, 11:59 PM

SCRIBBLING.

There is a lot of crossing out at the moment.

Horserider · 03-06-2012, 12:00 AM

I just watched the last episode of Firefly.

I wish the show hadn't ended.

amlptj · 03-06-2012, 12:01 AM

Cool, i'm fixing up my dialogue tags for chapter 15 of FREAKS. Then in class i'm going to try for the life of me to figure out what the hell to do with Unsung zero's ending. How i hate bullshit classes that are completely irrelevant to life.

lisalulu09 · 03-06-2012, 12:03 AM

I have decided that I'm going to mention the POV on the cards using highlighters.

amlptj · 03-06-2012, 12:18 AM

I'm going to have to draw a really large diagram to figure out what UZ's ending should be. I just cant figure out how everything is going to connect and how everyone is either going to end up dead or ruined without my MC's have to get there hands dirtier then I intended.

On another notes I might have to change my title because i found out Unsung Zeros is the name of a small rock band. I'm so pissed off now.

lisalulu09 · 03-06-2012, 12:21 AM

I changed my mind about the highlighters.

I'm going to need to add all the romance scenes into the outline...

Taylor_Writes · 03-06-2012, 12:33 AM

3 hours until my episode of Sherlock downloads on iTunes....

Booo.

03-05-2012, 08:46 PM	#27176
Thalia zaldrīzes buzdari iksos daor Join Date: May 2009 Location: The Land of Always Winter Posts: 6,953	My BIG BAD is... ...a fifteen-year-old girl. __________________ A constellation of tears on your lashes Burn everything you love, then burn the ashes In the end everything collides My childhood spat back out the monster that you see

03-05-2012, 08:47 PM	#27177
lisalulu09 Potterhead Gleek Join Date: Aug 2009 Location: Hogwarts Posts: 14,610	I'm not sure about my original beginning. I like it, but I don't know if it's hooky enough. I'm keeping the party. It's the rest of it I'm not sure about. __________________ Stupid Cupid - YA Romantic Comedy - Out in the world Ollie - MG Retelling of Oliver Twist -On hold Rome Forever After - YA Contemporary Romance - Writing the first draft (12K/24K) Reading: "Oliver Twist" - Charles Dickens "Tweet Heart" - Elizabeth Rudnick Facebook Blog Twitter Last edited by lisalulu09; 03-05-2012 at 08:48 PM. Reason: ;

03-05-2012, 08:49 PM	#27178
Thalia zaldrīzes buzdari iksos daor Join Date: May 2009 Location: The Land of Always Winter Posts: 6,953	I need to decide what POV I'm writing in... I know 3rd person, but whether I'm alternate chapters or just writing omniscient... I need Sophie's POV, but I need Veronika's for some scenes. __________________ A constellation of tears on your lashes Burn everything you love, then burn the ashes In the end everything collides My childhood spat back out the monster that you see

03-05-2012, 08:52 PM	#27179
lisalulu09 Potterhead Gleek Join Date: Aug 2009 Location: Hogwarts Posts: 14,610	POV is a pain. I kept alternating in close third between Matthew and Carla, but I don't feel... it works. __________________ Stupid Cupid - YA Romantic Comedy - Out in the world Ollie - MG Retelling of Oliver Twist -On hold Rome Forever After - YA Contemporary Romance - Writing the first draft (12K/24K) Reading: "Oliver Twist" - Charles Dickens "Tweet Heart" - Elizabeth Rudnick Facebook Blog Twitter

03-05-2012, 08:52 PM	#27180
amlptj Speling & grammer murderer, Sorrie! Join Date: Jul 2009 Location: Philadelphia PA Posts: 10,272	I feel like blabbering about my BIG BAD but that would ruin the ending of my first book for the 2 people here that are reading it. You guys really have no idea how excited and proud I am that i figured out this epic ending of my series. Almost every book has some form of a OMG mind screw twist. But this ending gives the whole series and earthshattering OOOOOMMMMMMGGGGG mind screw squared twist!!!!! __________________ Legend of the Freaks YA Horror/Thriller Series 8 of 12 books complete WiP Re-write of first book FREAKs Unsung Zeros Psychological Thriller Rewrite -1/2 done On Hold The Amnesia Journey YA Fantasy RBSL Contemp/romantic comedy Legend of a Freak (Blog!)

03-05-2012, 08:58 PM	#27181
Taylor_Writes #teampeeta Join Date: Aug 2009 Location: Somewhere Only We Know... Posts: 2,066	I don't know how old my BIG BAD is... Young, but older than the MC's, making him probably somewhere in his twenties, or maybe he could be eighteen... Or nineteen...

03-05-2012, 08:59 PM	#27182
Thalia zaldrīzes buzdari iksos daor Join Date: May 2009 Location: The Land of Always Winter Posts: 6,953	I LOVE that moment. I'm still working on the synopsis outline for Sherlockettes, but I can't work on it again until late tonight or tomorrow. __________________ A constellation of tears on your lashes Burn everything you love, then burn the ashes In the end everything collides My childhood spat back out the monster that you see

03-05-2012, 09:04 PM	#27183
lisalulu09 Potterhead Gleek Join Date: Aug 2009 Location: Hogwarts Posts: 14,610	Why not, Tally. Hairspray stuff? I'm keeping this scene. I'm changing the one after it? I actually don't know the difference between close third and omnicent third that well. I've never written it. __________________ Stupid Cupid - YA Romantic Comedy - Out in the world Ollie - MG Retelling of Oliver Twist -On hold Rome Forever After - YA Contemporary Romance - Writing the first draft (12K/24K) Reading: "Oliver Twist" - Charles Dickens "Tweet Heart" - Elizabeth Rudnick Facebook Blog Twitter

03-05-2012, 09:08 PM	#27184
amlptj Speling & grammer murderer, Sorrie! Join Date: Jul 2009 Location: Philadelphia PA Posts: 10,272	My MC's are 23 in the last two books in the series. Making it a full decade from the beginning to end of the series. With all the challenges they went through they grew up alot, and there abilities transformed and changed making them the people they are when there whole world is ripped and shattered right in front of them. They end up so used to winning against evil forces that be, used to being indestructible that they completely forget what its like to be on the loosing end. To not win in the end. I'm so evil to my characters!!!! __________________ Legend of the Freaks YA Horror/Thriller Series 8 of 12 books complete WiP Re-write of first book FREAKs Unsung Zeros Psychological Thriller Rewrite -1/2 done On Hold The Amnesia Journey YA Fantasy RBSL Contemp/romantic comedy Legend of a Freak (Blog!)

03-05-2012, 09:19 PM	#27185
lisalulu09 Potterhead Gleek Join Date: Aug 2009 Location: Hogwarts Posts: 14,610	Mathew and Carla are both eighteen in the first book. __________________ Stupid Cupid - YA Romantic Comedy - Out in the world Ollie - MG Retelling of Oliver Twist -On hold Rome Forever After - YA Contemporary Romance - Writing the first draft (12K/24K) Reading: "Oliver Twist" - Charles Dickens "Tweet Heart" - Elizabeth Rudnick Facebook Blog Twitter

03-05-2012, 09:24 PM	#27186
Taylor_Writes #teampeeta Join Date: Aug 2009 Location: Somewhere Only We Know... Posts: 2,066	Jamie and Andrew are eighteen. The six books last from August to July the next year, so they're eighteen throughout the whole series. Jamie dies before his nineteenth birthday.

03-05-2012, 09:26 PM	#27187
lisalulu09 Potterhead Gleek Join Date: Aug 2009 Location: Hogwarts Posts: 14,610	I'm not sure how long the series is. Could someone explain the different types of third person POV, and how they work, please? __________________ Stupid Cupid - YA Romantic Comedy - Out in the world Ollie - MG Retelling of Oliver Twist -On hold Rome Forever After - YA Contemporary Romance - Writing the first draft (12K/24K) Reading: "Oliver Twist" - Charles Dickens "Tweet Heart" - Elizabeth Rudnick Facebook Blog Twitter

03-05-2012, 09:28 PM	#27188
amlptj Speling & grammer murderer, Sorrie! Join Date: Jul 2009 Location: Philadelphia PA Posts: 10,272	Awwwwww that's sad!!!!! I killed off one true MC and could literally never do it again. You would think a real person died how utterly depressed I was after I had to kill him off. Yeah i dont really follow the YA age rules. First book there 13/14 Last two books there 23/24. But the majority of the series (second- seventh) they are YA range __________________ Legend of the Freaks YA Horror/Thriller Series 8 of 12 books complete WiP Re-write of first book FREAKs Unsung Zeros Psychological Thriller Rewrite -1/2 done On Hold The Amnesia Journey YA Fantasy RBSL Contemp/romantic comedy Legend of a Freak (Blog!)

03-05-2012, 09:30 PM	#27189
Taylor_Writes #teampeeta Join Date: Aug 2009 Location: Somewhere Only We Know... Posts: 2,066	He's the major character of the two, and I figured that's the best way to end the series. I could keep going on and on and on if I didn't.

03-05-2012, 09:53 PM	#27190
lisalulu09 Potterhead Gleek Join Date: Aug 2009 Location: Hogwarts Posts: 14,610	Dinner in a minute. __________________ Stupid Cupid - YA Romantic Comedy - Out in the world Ollie - MG Retelling of Oliver Twist -On hold Rome Forever After - YA Contemporary Romance - Writing the first draft (12K/24K) Reading: "Oliver Twist" - Charles Dickens "Tweet Heart" - Elizabeth Rudnick Facebook Blog Twitter

03-05-2012, 10:48 PM	#27191
Thalia zaldrīzes buzdari iksos daor Join Date: May 2009 Location: The Land of Always Winter Posts: 6,953	Yeah, Hairspray stuff. __________________ A constellation of tears on your lashes Burn everything you love, then burn the ashes In the end everything collides My childhood spat back out the monster that you see

03-05-2012, 10:57 PM	#27192
lisalulu09 Potterhead Gleek Join Date: Aug 2009 Location: Hogwarts Posts: 14,610	I figured out the POV thing!! ETA: I just crossed out an ENTIRE SCENE. __________________ Stupid Cupid - YA Romantic Comedy - Out in the world Ollie - MG Retelling of Oliver Twist -On hold Rome Forever After - YA Contemporary Romance - Writing the first draft (12K/24K) Reading: "Oliver Twist" - Charles Dickens "Tweet Heart" - Elizabeth Rudnick Facebook Blog Twitter Last edited by lisalulu09; 03-05-2012 at 11:21 PM.

03-05-2012, 11:57 PM	#27193
amlptj Speling & grammer murderer, Sorrie! Join Date: Jul 2009 Location: Philadelphia PA Posts: 10,272	Out of class. I feel like i want to bang my head against the wall till it bleeds. So what's new with everyone else? __________________ Legend of the Freaks YA Horror/Thriller Series 8 of 12 books complete WiP Re-write of first book FREAKs Unsung Zeros Psychological Thriller Rewrite -1/2 done On Hold The Amnesia Journey YA Fantasy RBSL Contemp/romantic comedy Legend of a Freak (Blog!)

03-05-2012, 11:59 PM	#27194
lisalulu09 Potterhead Gleek Join Date: Aug 2009 Location: Hogwarts Posts: 14,610	SCRIBBLING. There is a lot of crossing out at the moment. __________________ Stupid Cupid - YA Romantic Comedy - Out in the world Ollie - MG Retelling of Oliver Twist -On hold Rome Forever After - YA Contemporary Romance - Writing the first draft (12K/24K) Reading: "Oliver Twist" - Charles Dickens "Tweet Heart" - Elizabeth Rudnick Facebook Blog Twitter

03-06-2012, 12:00 AM	#27195
Horserider Ever onward Join Date: Dec 2008 Location: The TARDIS with David Tennant Posts: 19,109	I just watched the last episode of Firefly. I wish the show hadn't ended. __________________ \| Blog \| Twitter \| I have hated the words and I have loved them, and I hope I have made them right. ~The Book Thief WIPs: Heartbreaker - writing Currently Reading: Clockwork Princess by Cassandra Clare

03-06-2012, 12:01 AM	#27196
amlptj Speling & grammer murderer, Sorrie! Join Date: Jul 2009 Location: Philadelphia PA Posts: 10,272	Cool, i'm fixing up my dialogue tags for chapter 15 of FREAKS. Then in class i'm going to try for the life of me to figure out what the hell to do with Unsung zero's ending. How i hate bullshit classes that are completely irrelevant to life. __________________ Legend of the Freaks YA Horror/Thriller Series 8 of 12 books complete WiP Re-write of first book FREAKs Unsung Zeros Psychological Thriller Rewrite -1/2 done On Hold The Amnesia Journey YA Fantasy RBSL Contemp/romantic comedy Legend of a Freak (Blog!)

03-06-2012, 12:03 AM	#27197
lisalulu09 Potterhead Gleek Join Date: Aug 2009 Location: Hogwarts Posts: 14,610	I have decided that I'm going to mention the POV on the cards using highlighters. __________________ Stupid Cupid - YA Romantic Comedy - Out in the world Ollie - MG Retelling of Oliver Twist -On hold Rome Forever After - YA Contemporary Romance - Writing the first draft (12K/24K) Reading: "Oliver Twist" - Charles Dickens "Tweet Heart" - Elizabeth Rudnick Facebook Blog Twitter

03-06-2012, 12:18 AM	#27198
amlptj Speling & grammer murderer, Sorrie! Join Date: Jul 2009 Location: Philadelphia PA Posts: 10,272	I'm going to have to draw a really large diagram to figure out what UZ's ending should be. I just cant figure out how everything is going to connect and how everyone is either going to end up dead or ruined without my MC's have to get there hands dirtier then I intended. On another notes I might have to change my title because i found out Unsung Zeros is the name of a small rock band. I'm so pissed off now. __________________ Legend of the Freaks YA Horror/Thriller Series 8 of 12 books complete WiP Re-write of first book FREAKs Unsung Zeros Psychological Thriller Rewrite -1/2 done On Hold The Amnesia Journey YA Fantasy RBSL Contemp/romantic comedy Legend of a Freak (Blog!)

03-06-2012, 12:21 AM	#27199
lisalulu09 Potterhead Gleek Join Date: Aug 2009 Location: Hogwarts Posts: 14,610	I changed my mind about the highlighters. I'm going to need to add all the romance scenes into the outline... __________________ Stupid Cupid - YA Romantic Comedy - Out in the world Ollie - MG Retelling of Oliver Twist -On hold Rome Forever After - YA Contemporary Romance - Writing the first draft (12K/24K) Reading: "Oliver Twist" - Charles Dickens "Tweet Heart" - Elizabeth Rudnick Facebook Blog Twitter

03-06-2012, 12:33 AM	#27200
Taylor_Writes #teampeeta Join Date: Aug 2009 Location: Somewhere Only We Know... Posts: 2,066	3 hours until my episode of Sherlock downloads on iTunes.... Booo.

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