Help, what is this agent really saying?

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I just got another rejection from an agent. But, what is he really saying? I am trying to dissect his answer.


Hey there

Thanks so much for giving me a shot at your memoir. I’m sorry to say that I wasn’t connecting wholeheartedly with your writing, despite its poise and polish, so I ought to step aside, but I truly appreciate the look, and I wish you the best of luck!

Sincerely,

Stephen
 

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Looks like he thinks you wrote it well, but doesn't feel excited about it enough to offer representation. He probably thinks someone else is going to love this and you'll do better with them ^_^
 

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The agent is saying: This is my form rejection letter.
 

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Agree with the others - a form rejection.
 

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I am new to writing. All I wanted was share my story with the masses. But, I see it's not going to be that easy. I guess had delusions of grandeur. lol

His rejection was better than some of the rest. At least he didn't say. Not for me. Moving on. Not the right fit. No! Not enough time or try another agent............lol

I don't want to do self-publishing. That would be my last resort. Thanks to all of you who responded to my thread.
 

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Suggestion- Unless you have a very standout life story, a memoir may be difficult to publish. Lots of good fiction includes some elements of the author's (or someone else that the author knows) life with an engaging story built around it. Attracting an agent can still take a lot of work, but if your goal is to share a great story with the masses then perhaps a novel would give you a bigger platform.
 

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Suggestion- Unless you have a very standout life story, a memoir may be difficult to publish. Lots of good fiction includes some elements of the author's (or someone else that the author knows) life with an engaging story built around it. Attracting an agent can still take a lot of work, but if your goal is to share a great story with the masses then perhaps a novel would give you a bigger platform.

Thank you so much. You have given me inspiration to continue on my quest to getting published. I have to do some research. I don't really know that much about this art form of writing. Thanks WriteStarfish.
 

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Thank you so much. You have given me inspiration to continue on my quest to getting published. I have to do some research. I don't really know that much about this art form of writing. Thanks WriteStarfish.


You're welcome! I'm so glad that I've given you some inspiration. Always remember to enjoy writing. Then, even when the disappointment comes, you still have a reason to smile. Best of luck!
 

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If it makes you feel better, I got this exact response from him and form or not, it was still nicely worded.
 

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a form letter would start with "Hey there"?

A form letter can start out however a person wants to write the letter. It sounds like this agent wanted to make his/her form letter friendly and encouraging.
 

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A form letter can start out however a person wants to write the letter. It sounds like this agent wanted to make his/her form letter friendly and encouraging.

At first, I did think that he was trying to be encouraging. But, it is most definitely a form letter.
 

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Ok, I got a letter from an agent who said my writing was very marketable but my story was slow and she got bored within the first few pages but when she skipped to the end she was intrested. She gave me pointers on how to fix it and wished me the best of luck. It sounded promising. Now, when I do the rewrites should I send it back to her for a second look? Or was this her form of rejection letter. As I started the rewrites, I found a new title. Should I tell her of our previous e-mail or just submit it as new. I know she probably won't remember me because I am dragging my feet....
 

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Ok, I got a letter from an agent who said my writing was very marketable but my story was slow and she got bored within the first few pages but when she skipped to the end she was intrested. She gave me pointers on how to fix it and wished me the best of luck. It sounded promising. Now, when I do the rewrites should I send it back to her for a second look? Or was this her form of rejection letter. As I started the rewrites, I found a new title. Should I tell her of our previous e-mail or just submit it as new. I know she probably won't remember me because I am dragging my feet....

This is a rejection, but a personal one. She thought enough about you to give you pointers. But she will remember your story, if she doesn't remember you, and resubmitting without an invitation is pointless and will probably piss off the agent if you query future projects. Unless you've totally overhauled your story, and with a memoir that's pretty hard to do, use her suggestions for improvements to have a better manuscript for the next agent you query. If she wanted you to resubmit she would have said so in the letter---wishing you the best of luck was the rejection part of the letter, unfortunately.
 

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This is a rejection, but a personal one. She thought enough about you to give you pointers. But she will remember your story, if she doesn't remember you, and resubmitting without an invitation is pointless and will probably piss off the agent if you query future projects. Unless you've totally overhauled your story, and with a memoir that's pretty hard to do, use her suggestions for improvements to have a better manuscript for the next agent you query. If she wanted you to resubmit she would have said so in the letter---wishing you the best of luck was the rejection part of the letter, unfortunately.

Thank you for pointing that out PinkAmy. I am learning so much being a member of this forum.

How long should it take to hear from an agent, after submitting a full manuscript? I know the time length probably varies.
 

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Lolo- I've waited anywhere for a few hours (rejection) to about 6 months. It just depends on where in the queue your manuscript falls and what other obligations the agent has to her signed clients. I've been told that agents don't usually read the full unless they are interested--even if they request it. I've read on agent blogs that they can tell in the first paragraph whether or not they are interested and that they stop reading once they lose interest. I totally redid my first chapters to make them more compelling and to keep the pacing and tension.
 

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Lolo- I've waited anywhere for a few hours (rejection) to about 6 months. It just depends on where in the queue your manuscript falls and what other obligations the agent has to her signed clients. I've been told that agents don't usually read the full unless they are interested--even if they request it. I've read on agent blogs that they can tell in the first paragraph whether or not they are interested and that they stop reading once they lose interest. I totally redid my first chapters to make them more compelling and to keep the pacing and tension.


Thanks PinkAmy, that is excellent advice. Are you a published author? Agents can tell if they are interested by reading the first paragraph? WOW!
 

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I've read more than one agent say they could tell from the first paragraph or page. In the agent section you'll find locked threads at the top from agents who came to post here for a while. There are some good agent blogs that say it too. Depressing, isn't it?

Not published, but I read a ton of threads and I take a lot of advice give to other people, as well as advice given to me. I picked out a few people to critique manuscripts from folks who's posts I respected. Sometimes we traded manuscripts, other times they just looked at what I had. Since that time I've been on the fence about publishing and I stopped querying due to concerns that one or two awesome people could be dragged into the mud, if my book has legal issues (long story, the whole book is about unintended legal consequences for other people and how that effected me, so I don't want to cause a reason for a sequel, LOL.) I continue tweaking though, I found about a journal from the time of the memoir--about 200k words of journal! I'm going to add a few snippets in appropriate places.
 

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I just wanted to comment because I got plenty of rejections on my memoir, Breaking the Code. If you want to sell your memoir as a memoir, don't give up. Rejections are just part of it. If you feel like you've done all you can do, start something else. Then when the passion returns, get back out there. And I don't mean just in sending it out to agents. I mean, find the publishers who accept unagented material. There are plenty of them. The "big six NY publishers" seem to be the goal of every writer. But I'm here to tell you that it is entirely possible that you could get more attention for your book with a mid-sized publisher or even a small one. All you need is a passionate editor/publisher - someone who loves your book and wants nothing more than for it to succeed.

My memoir was a hard sell to some. Is it memoir? Is it military? Is it for baby-boomer women? Is it narrative nonfiction? That was really a problem. But my publisher, Sourcebooks had no problem with it. In fact, many right here on AW told me that I shouldn't call it a memoir because of the above issues. When I first spoke to my editor, he was surprised by that and said, "of course it's a memoir." I love AW, by the way, but you can't turn your brain off for any website or well-meaning person for that matter. As cliche' as it may sound, follow your heart. If this is the story you were meant to tell, keep with it. Do absolutely everything you can to get it out there. Attend workshops, and conferences. Join a critique group. Use social media. Do what it takes because that is what you need to get your story in the hands of your audience.

Just my opinion. ~Karen
 

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I've read more than one agent say they could tell from the first paragraph or page. In the agent section you'll find locked threads at the top from agents who came to post here for a while. There are some good agent blogs that say it too. Depressing, isn't it?

Not published, but I read a ton of threads and I take a lot of advice give to other people, as well as advice given to me. I picked out a few people to critique manuscripts from folks who's posts I respected. Sometimes we traded manuscripts, other times they just looked at what I had. Since that time I've been on the fence about publishing and I stopped querying due to concerns that one or two awesome people could be dragged into the mud, if my book has legal issues (long story, the whole book is about unintended legal consequences for other people and how that effected me, so I don't want to cause a reason for a sequel, LOL.) I continue tweaking though, I found about a journal from the time of the memoir--about 200k words of journal! I'm going to add a few snippets in appropriate places.

Yes it is very depressing PinkAmy. Very interesting your book in about legal issues. I understand how you feel about not wanting to drag people you care about into the mud. I had to use restraint when writing my book because I didn't want to cause any friction and tension among my siblings. I left out a lot of stuff. I don't want to write sequel either. lol
 

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I just wanted to comment because I got plenty of rejections on my memoir, Breaking the Code. If you want to sell your memoir as a memoir, don't give up. Rejections are just part of it. If you feel like you've done all you can do, start something else. Then when the passion returns, get back out there. And I don't mean just in sending it out to agents. I mean, find the publishers who accept unagented material. There are plenty of them. The "big six NY publishers" seem to be the goal of every writer. But I'm here to tell you that it is entirely possible that you could get more attention for your book with a mid-sized publisher or even a small one. All you need is a passionate editor/publisher - someone who loves your book and wants nothing more than for it to succeed.

My memoir was a hard sell to some. Is it memoir? Is it military? Is it for baby-boomer women? Is it narrative nonfiction? That was really a problem. But my publisher, Sourcebooks had no problem with it. In fact, many right here on AW told me that I shouldn't call it a memoir because of the above issues. When I first spoke to my editor, he was surprised by that and said, "of course it's a memoir." I love AW, by the way, but you can't turn your brain off for any website or well-meaning person for that matter. As cliche' as it may sound, follow your heart. If this is the story you were meant to tell, keep with it. Do absolutely everything you can to get it out there. Attend workshops, and conferences. Join a critique group. Use social media. Do what it takes because that is what you need to get your story in the hands of your audience.

Just my opinion. ~Karen

Thank you so much Karen, your words were inspiring and empowering. Congratulations on getting published. Are you going to be writing another book?
 

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Yes, I have an agent waiting for two of my books; one is an early chapter book and the other is another memoir. The other memoir is about raising a son who has ADHD.