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I want a second opinion on something I read today over at Romance University. The editor there claims that good writers avoid present participial phrases because they almost never used correctly.
The example given is this:
The problem is that the phrase starting with 'reassuring' is an adjective that should modify 'reached', but it is next to 'pocket' and seems to modify that.
How serious an issue is this? I'm certain that I've seen constructions like this in printed fiction before. I do have some of them in my own writing, so I'm wondering if I should hammer them out. Or is this editor just one opinion among many, and others consider the present participial phrase to be valid grammar?
It *is* valid grammar, I suppose, but often used incorrectly. The editor's preferred fix for the above is:
A fix that retains the participial phrase doesn't seem possible in this case. I can't see a way to put 'reassuring' next to 'reached'. But the construction should be valid sometimes, such as:
Since 'red' is the noun doing the 'indicating', this sentence should be fine. Or should the present participial phrase always be avoided?
The example given is this:
Serena reached into her cloak pocket, reassuring herself that the second hourglass was tucked inside.
The problem is that the phrase starting with 'reassuring' is an adjective that should modify 'reached', but it is next to 'pocket' and seems to modify that.
How serious an issue is this? I'm certain that I've seen constructions like this in printed fiction before. I do have some of them in my own writing, so I'm wondering if I should hammer them out. Or is this editor just one opinion among many, and others consider the present participial phrase to be valid grammar?
It *is* valid grammar, I suppose, but often used incorrectly. The editor's preferred fix for the above is:
Serena reached into her cloak pocket to reassure herself that the second hourglass was tucked inside.
A fix that retains the participial phrase doesn't seem possible in this case. I can't see a way to put 'reassuring' next to 'reached'. But the construction should be valid sometimes, such as:
He saw red, indicating danger.
Since 'red' is the noun doing the 'indicating', this sentence should be fine. Or should the present participial phrase always be avoided?