First-Person Thought, Punctuation, and Italicization

trumpetology · 06-21-2012, 08:49 AM

I'm aware of the rule that in dialogue a question mark replaces the comma before a tag. Then, I know that I can use italics and tags to show internal thought. But when these factors all came together today, I realized I was lost. This is rough draft material, so I'm mainly interested in the concept of how to punctuate/itlaicize or not the following, but if anyone has a crafty way to avoid the whole "i though" issue, I'm all ears.

Thanks!:

After a particularly uninspired solo, I earn questioning glances from my bandmates. Me? I think, dismissing them with a shrug. I’m not even supposed to be here.

SomethingOrOther · 06-21-2012, 08:56 AM

You could rephrase it like this (or some variant of it):

After a particularly uninspired solo, I earn questioning glances from my bandmates. Me? I dismiss them with a shrug. I’m not even supposed to be here.

trumpetology · 06-21-2012, 10:32 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by SomethingOrOther

You could rephrase it like this (or some variant of it):

After a particularly uninspired solo, I earn questioning glances from my bandmates. Me? I dismiss them with a shrug. I’m not even supposed to be here.

yep. That would solve it. Thanks for taking a look at this

06-21-2012, 08:49 AM	#1
trumpetology practical experience, FTW Join Date: Nov 2010 Location: New York Posts: 337	First-Person Thought, Punctuation, and Italicization I'm aware of the rule that in dialogue a question mark replaces the comma before a tag. Then, I know that I can use italics and tags to show internal thought. But when these factors all came together today, I realized I was lost. This is rough draft material, so I'm mainly interested in the concept of how to punctuate/itlaicize or not the following, but if anyone has a crafty way to avoid the whole "i though" issue, I'm all ears. Thanks!: After a particularly uninspired solo, I earn questioning glances from my bandmates. Me? I think, dismissing them with a shrug. I’m not even supposed to be here. __________________ my (non-writing related) blog...: Bad Signage Blog

06-21-2012, 08:56 AM	#2
SomethingOrOther Official AW Carnivorous Pony Join Date: Jul 2011 Posts: 1,032	You could rephrase it like this (or some variant of it): After a particularly uninspired solo, I earn questioning glances from my bandmates. Me? I dismiss them with a shrug. I’m not even supposed to be here. __________________ Current WIPs Baby Pictures of Famous Dictators: (571,056/780,000) Invasion of the Complaining Chickens (Geriatric Fiction): (1,124,641/1,520,000) Hardonasaurass Rex (Dinosaur Erotica): (215,919/285,000) Some Dude I'm Kidnapping: (Trunked) This is my blog. I'd like you to read it. Thanks! (It has nothing of value right now, so don't bother.) [Most recent update: 5/11/13] Last edited by SomethingOrOther; 06-21-2012 at 09:10 AM.

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