Rate-a-Poem: I measure every Grief I meet

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by Emily Dickinson
(1830 - 1886)

I measure every Grief I meet

I measure every Grief I meet
With narrow, probing, Eyes –
I wonder if It weighs like Mine –
Or has an Easier size.

I wonder if They bore it long –
Or did it just begin –
I could not tell the Date of Mine –
It feels so old a pain –

I wonder if it hurts to live –
And if They have to try –
And whether – could They choose between –
It would not be – to die –

I note that Some – gone patient long –
At length, renew their smile –
An imitation of a Light
That has so little Oil –

I wonder if when Years have piled –
Some Thousands – on the Harm –
That hurt them early – such a lapse
Could give them any Balm –

Or would they go on aching still
Through Centuries of Nerve –
Enlightened to a larger Pain –
In Contrast with the Love –

The Grieved – are many – I am told –
There is the various Cause –
Death – is but one – and comes but once –
And only nails the eyes –

There's Grief of Want – and grief of Cold –
A sort they call "Despair" –
There's Banishment from native Eyes –
In Sight of Native Air –

And though I may not guess the kind –
Correctly – yet to me
A piercing Comfort it affords
In passing Calvary –

To note the fashions – of the Cross –
And how they're mostly worn –
Still fascinated to presume
That Some – are like My Own –
 

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I've gotta say that I found the dashes distracted from the piece for me also. For me, punctuation is important in many poems because they help guide the reader's eye down the right path of the poet's thoughts.

In this poem, they were like false herrings. In my mind, a dash usually denotes that the following thought is an extension or an amplification of the preceding statement.

With the way she has them presented, my mind automatically flowed in a certain cadence but was continually interrupted and, in the end, it inhibited my enjoyment of the poem.
 

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Au Contraire

I liked the dashes etc. because I can hear her pausing, thinking, wondering, collating her thoughts about the topic, which is so open-ended.

Thanks. I'll have to read it several more times.
 

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What Jill said... I gave it a five. I've never read that one and it killled me. It's a theme I've wanted to write about for a long time, but never knew even how to begin. Wow.
 

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I liked it a lot. IMO the capitalizations and some of the dashes are distracting, though.

Like Jill, I'll be reading over this one and contemplating it more. It grabbed me from the very first line and held me to the end.
 

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I thought, at first, that the dashes would distract. Then, the assonances bothered me.

But, by the middle, I felt that they helped convey the author's desperation. The dashes, to me, sounded like the halting, gasping speech of one who's still sobbing and can only get the words out in bursts between convulsive wails.

The assonances, to me, gave the effect of a chord slightly off: they created a tension that heightened the sense of discomfort, of unease. The sort of effect that Thelonious Monk got by hitting a 'wrong key'.

It's an extremely personal work. I'm not sure whether I identify with it, or I just want to, because the despair is so sublime. (The Smiths at their height did the same to me -- made me wish I really were that miserable.)

Excellent.
 

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poetinahat said:
I'm not sure whether I identify with it, or I just want to, because the despair is so sublime. (The Smiths at their height did the same to me -- made me wish I really were that miserable.)
That's a funny observation and so true, the idea of wanting to be unhappy because an artist is so good at conveying the depth of that pain, because you want to experience emotions as fully.
 

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I liked this poem quite a bit, and I gave it a 4, but I have always felt that something is just slightly "off", sound-wise, in Dickinson's poetry. I can't put my finger on it, but it never flows very smoothly for me. Nonetheless, there is so much more redeeming in it, that I went with 4.
 

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skylarburris said:
...but I have always felt that something is just slightly "off", sound-wise, in Dickinson's poetry. I can't put my finger on it, but it never flows very smoothly for me.

Yes, Dickinson is famous for this. She was a great poet, just not a great rhymer. What I've noticed from reading many of her poems is that she didn't seem to understand that in order to make one line rhyme with another line, that the 2 lines must have approximately the same number of syllables.
 

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I gave this three stars after one read, maybe because what was said moved me more than how it was said. But, after the fourth read, I wish I could change it to four stars.


I found the title most intriguing.


Whether this is correct in actual meaning or not, the poem stirred strong feelings of curiosity and self-discovery by proxy.
 

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One thing I like about this poem is that it makes me picture someone having an internal dialogue while they are interacting with others.

I'm sure that no one in Emily Dickinson's time ever spoke much about their "crosses" they bore, and yet she was able to see them during what, I'd bet, were superficial interactions and conversations.
 

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I know I'm rather late with this (just now getting around to rating some of the poems), but I give this one a 4.5. I don't always comprehend a lot of her poetry, but this one hit a resounding chord with me when I was really depressed 6 years ago and not much else was getting through.
 

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I love Emily Dickinson in general, but this is not one of my favorites. I seem to trip over the words a bit and prefer a smoother flow.