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Old 03-20-2006, 12:05 AM   #1
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Chain, chain, chain, chain of haiku fools

A haiku game...

The last line of the previous person's haiku becomes the first line of the next person's haiku.

For purposes of this game, my definition of haiku is simply a 5-7-5 syllable format.

I'll start with a haiku inspired by the lyrics of Aretha Franklin's Chain Of Fools.


You treated me mean,
now I'm where you wanted me--
a link in your chain

The first line of the next haiku becomes

A link in your chain
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Old 03-20-2006, 12:15 AM   #2
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Old 03-20-2006, 02:38 AM   #3
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Fair weather passing
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Old 03-20-2006, 03:01 AM   #4
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Fair weather passing
Over this glorious day
Ah, earthly heaven
Oops! Sorry ddgrphon; perhaps it will take a few more links to illustrate the chained formation.

The first line of the next haiku in the sequence needs to be the last line of the last haiku posted. . .

crown of lovers fair
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Old 03-20-2006, 04:58 AM   #5
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Crown of lovers fair
wafted scent of purfume lasts
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lingers on the air
rings and echoes in my brain
your voice calls my name
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Oops! Sorry ddgrphon; perhaps it will take a few more links to illustrate the chained formation.

The first line of the next haiku in the sequence needs to be the last line of the last haiku posted. . .

crown of lovers fair

OOPS! See what happens when you're half-asleep and reading -- I'll get with the program.
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remaining current
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born to yonder shore
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faux-sweetness beckons
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she charges the mall
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it's sale day today
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It's sale day today
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In some Godly place, will shine

More than your eyes...no.
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"Shows a single bud" would not be the start of much. I suggest that somebody can change it to something like "A single bud shows" (Hmm, that would've done just as well on my piece.)
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Shows a single Bud
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